Missing you finds me in unexpected moments;
When a couple kisses on the TV or I
come upon your smell on the pillow
(your jeans are still crumpled beside the closet door).
Missing you comes in waves like the ocean,
overwhelming me when I thought I was fine.
I hear a song on the radio or laugh as I
remember a story you told,
(how Adam got his belly button)
and the next thing I know,
I'm in tears.
Missing you waits for the silence to fall.
It lies next to me on your side of the bed,
bubbles up inside me like hand soap in the dishwasher,
and taunts me with all the stupid things I said.
("I hate you for leaving me here like this.")
The hour glass of time lets go a grain of sand
It's been eight days. Three hundred fifty seven to go.
Author notes
I chose "I will remember you." Sarah McLachlan has been one of my favorites for over a decade. Her lyrics were what grabbed me also!
A contest entry
- Sarah McLachlan~Contest~ by Angel With No Halo.
1700 points, ended February 2, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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wow
this poem is so cool related to our soldiers, and how much we miss them when they are gone, stay strong, congrats on your HM here, and keep writing, -Amy
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Yes, but absence makes the heart grow fonder, and welcome home kisses are the best, there is a light at the end of every tunnel.
and, how do you know if Adam had a navel or not? there are no pictures of him, hehe.
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when I look out of the HumV's window
I see the sun making shine and makes shadow
so I count my days and I say it might
half of 358 is 179 because half of days are night
does the love ever met drunks like us?
how crazy thuds our brain makes around us!!
how many we laugh like kids?
and when we walked together we past our shadows.
I will be back and we will hold hands
then if we sing we shut the other bands
sorry for my craziness but I am in Love with you
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Your play on this was almost whimsical. If true, may I ask what happened?
It does take time... and you have to take it one day at a time.. or it will never let you live a normal life. I truly loved this poem. You made it your own and put a ton of wonderful emotion into this write. Thank you for your beautiful entry
~Krys~
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You must know you're the most beautiful writer of emotion. Can you imagine how the 357 must sit on the other side? No one to tell those stories to or watch learn forward, feminine curves on display; yes and all fired up offering vigour. You and that kitchen spend too much time together. ---- Thank you
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One day at a time right, this poem is full of real love. I love it.
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I like the wording in this - very heartfelt and full of emotion. I, personally, would have done some of the line breaks differently as it would make it easier to read - but that is just the way I write and does not reflect on how you write.
good luck in your contest and best wishes for the future.
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Well done!
Really nice words. Seems very personal and I like universal but the words were really cool! Thanks for the thoughts and words.
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