Your love is a patch of heaven’s garden
A playground of beautiful caresses,
Cuddling me with sweet and sincere kisses;
Cradling me ‘til I forget my burden.
A secret cabin where I could listen
To songs of my heart with rhyming verses,
Your love is a patch of heaven’s garden
A playground of beautiful caresses.
I thought I would be forever hidden
You brought me to a place of happiness -
A ballroom where eternity dances
A shelter, which is divinely laden;
Your love is a patch of heaven’s garden.
Author notes
A Rondel is a French form consisting of 13 lines: two quatrains and a quintet, rhyming as follows:
ABba abAB abbaA. The capital letters are the refrains, or repeats.
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A contest entry
- ~The Special Month of February~ by Sweetangelgrace.
800 points, ended February 6, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Love Poetry Please by FallingTwilight.
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This poem is very sincere and I really liked it. Good job!
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I can smell the flowers!
Well, this brings me right into His Garden. Now I can go to sleep sweetly! When your words were coming up [I've dial up] I was wondering what color you'd use to line up with the border. Nice job. I related & feel quite at peace right now. Thank you!
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Thank you for entering
Very rich in some wonderful imagery. The love we have for one another should be like a safe place you can run to in a time of struggle. Well penned!
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The imagery here is amazing you paint such a beuatiful picture with your amazing words
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I coudn't find the words, so you did it for me!
It's a beautiful poem, it really is, it discribes how you can feel about someone else, what you feel for someone else, just in the right words! thanx
Thanks for entering!
~~GRACY~~ -
Beautiful
Indeed it is and all gardens must be atended to or the plants will perish so let respect be the water and the kindness be the dirt let the raindrops be the kisses and love will be like heaven I kid you not .
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I love the Rondel and using it for a love poem is perfect! This write has a smooth flow that blends into a passionate image of love. Perfect!
Love,
Amera♥
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great.. but..
great..write but..too much reapeated ideas..though prett good all in all.
Comment my poems if you will..thnks
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A lovely poem. Heartfelt. Skillfully crafted Rondel. Good imagery, flow, rhyme and tone. Lovely depth of feeling. Nice descriptives and metaphor. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Well penned and much enjoy. Best wishes in the contest.
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