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A simple tear

Magenta lingers on hollow ground,
voices drift for a finial moment.
As your footsteps fade into yesterday,
I will shed a simple tear for you.

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The Prompt: Simplicity of Goodbye.

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  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 3, 2008

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    wow! i love how the last lines linger as a footstep would when missing someone in sorrows to drown! wow! wonderful job in such few words too
    good luck in the contest!
    stephanie =)


  • Darianna
    January 21, 2008

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    Oh the last two lines really tugged at the heart-strings! Really liked the fading of the footsteps. It was a clear and simple image.

    Thankyou for entering my contest! Good Luck!

    Dari xxx