Sad empty-eyed she lies atop the knoll,
besmirched, encroached on by another.
A leaf falls silent tolling passing of summer days,
an empty shell of long gone estimations.
Author notes
My poems used:
1. Empty-eyed she lies
2. Intruder
3. A leaf falls
4. Lazy Daisy Stitch
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A contest entry
- Reiterated Recyclings by EnigmaticMonday.
700 points, ended January 23, 2008, 9 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best All-Around Prewrites From 2008 by amaranthine lover.
1400 points, ended January 9, 27 entries
Honorable mention
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exquisite.
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I am very impressed with this...you say so much and leave me wanting more. Great job
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short but powerful, i especially like line 3, makes me want to read A leaf falls. good job
~Silver Winner -
Oh this is much better! It flows perfectly now
It leaves a very empty feeling behind it. Kind of a sad, regretful sigh. I do love this so!
Thankyou for entering my contest.
E-M -
I love the feel of this, however I'm not sure about the second line. It doesn't seem to fit with the rest of the lines you have chosen. You can change it if you wish, you have until the contest closes.
E-M
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