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Chocolate in hot milk

Chilled morning breezes
You on my side
Your smell, ecstatic

Your eyes smile
I melt in your look
Like chocolate melts in hot milk.

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My sweetheart has a smile that actually melts me down.

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  • creationsfromheart
    February 5, 2008

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    this is nice , however you may want to chage you to your for better read.

    Your eyes smile
    I melt in your look
    Like chocolate melts in hot milk


    • peru
      February 9, 2008
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      Thanks a lot for the correction.


  • nordicsky silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    I really enjoy these quickie poems and this is a wonderful example of the form.
    You have entered into the spirit of the contest and given it your own personal twist.
    So many poems on AP seem to mention love and chocolate. Funny, since I started writing poetry, ten months ago, I’ve developed a passion for good chocolate and I love people and the world a whole lot more.

    Thanks for posting this.
    Regards
    Peter


    • peru
      January 23, 2008
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      Thank you for such a sweet comment Peter.
      I love chocolate and especially hot chocolate.

      Whenever I am happy I go for a chocolate treat.
      Whenever I am sad, I eat chocolates and my mood gets back to normal.

      Well I love sweets and sweet people.

      Take care and God bless....

      --Peru.