you keep me up
you keep me from falling
so sweet
you always satisfy
people try to make me doubt
saying what we have aint right
but i know what fills their mind
and jealously wont get them anywhere
my heart keeps beating
keeps beating for you
if you were ever to let me fall
shattered on the floor like a glass rose
so keep my heart beating
beating full of love
let me show you just how i feel
and keep my heart beating
i wont listen to the sound of there voice
i wont hear when they tell me those lies
but will you do the same
and ignore the surround sound
all we need is me and you
to keep our hearts beating
but my mind is telling me lies
and its you that rips me apart
im deperate to catch this heart
before it falls and shatters
you help now and then
but at times you let it down
but my heart will keep beating
baeting for you
just let me say
i Love you but i doubt if you love me too
Author notes
um im not sure if this fits or not, i jsut wrote it without thinking.
hope its ok
YOU CUT ME OPEN AND I KEEP BLEEDING LOVE
A contest entry
- Write me a poem inspired by the following song....... by MaMa-2-be-Cindy.
450 points, ended February 4, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - OPTIONS AND THE BLESSED DARK ANGEL by Devilish Temptation.
600 points, ended March 19, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
what ya think?
Comments
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Very good work here my friend I like reading it! very good in captuing the emotion thankx for entering my contest
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G'Day DarkAngel24
Very lyrical, strong and well penned. Great emotions and imagery expressed
Congratulations on the Gold trophy this has won previously
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Thank you for your entry
Best of luck
Stay safe
~Manda
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Outstanding
There was a lot in this that I liked, your faith in your lover and not letting other people tear you apart. This has a great flow and I thought this was deep and emotional. Best of luck in the contest.
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Excellent
A very sad and deeply felt write showing of the hopes that the one you hold feelings for will always give them back and keep your heart alive well done all my best wishes Brian.
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Very very sweet and softly sentimental love and longing. Great write once again Katy...keep up the good work, Gril!
Evan
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AWW
This is so sweet, it is so brave of you to put your heart out there like that, keep up the great writing and keep having the courage to let people know how you feel it is amazing and you should be proud. although I am sorry to hear he doesnt feel the same.
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Wow This Is Sad
I love you but I doubt if you love me too. The title Keep My Heart Beating is most definitely a perfect title. The title flows with the whole poem. You did a nice job on this one. The romance and deep love to where nothing can get in the way is excellent. Thank you for sharing your poetry with me.
Your Auntie
Kelle Marie
stavykm
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Holly crap are kidding me, this is spot on.....
You have so totally rode with the songs theme here
Amazing, lov'd it
Pls pop into your author notes the line on the contest page, to show you have read and understood the page Thank you
The best of Luck
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Awww such a lovely poem hunni, so full of love and romance, very well penned. Good luck in the contest with it
Mum x
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