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Cloudless

Too long I gazed in hazy unvapoured air,
In rainless whisper,
To dream the fall of sleep's elusive weight.

Wisp-rings, as they occur as faces looking back,
Under cover of the seas;
Running through our sinews and muscled humour.

These patterns of beauty revealed to our eyes,
Slow doves at the kill.
So I sleep and dream inheritance in my cloudless dying world.




Author notes

A poem concerning the half-world of sleep and semi-consciousness.

Prompt: reiterated recyclings.
Poems by Animarising, used as follows:

1. Pure, http://allpoetry.com/poem/3810693
2. Bowl of Words, http://allpoetry.com/poem/3681360
3. Perhaps it is the colour, which invades http://allpoetry.com/poem/3600486
4. Memories in smoke, http://allpoetry.com/poem/3823321
5. Under cover of the seas, http://allpoetry.com/poem/3814967
6. We, the Just, http://allpoetry.com/poem/3804305
7. Pale wings of the rain,http://allpoetry.com/poem/3791200
8. Inner light (of Zojo-ji), http://allpoetry.com/poem/3716638
9. Slow death in surgeons' hands. http://allpoetry.com/poem/3778750

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  • EnigmaticMonday
    January 22, 2008
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    I love the dreamy essence of this. It kind of weaves through the waking moments into the dreamers realm. I especially loved the first 3 lines.

    Just one edit I think to be made here:

    "Running through our sinews and and muscled humour."

    You have 2 ands. Other than that, a very well crafted poem.

    Thankyou for entering my contest.

    E-M