green clogs
her hips
i watch
i watch,
not the green
nor the hips that twist in foliage
not that, not the revelation of a sacrament: the thick voice of spring
even silence doubts-
i watch,
not the curve, not the green
but
the thin layer
of fog
A contest entry
- Leonard Cohen ~ I'm Your Man by Heart Sutra.
2300 points, ended January 30, 2008, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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I really like this piece
The simplicity was perfect, complemented by the long line and words "revelation of a sacrament"
Wonderfully written
-eveline
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This is really good...the thing is in your author's comments you didnt' write your favorite Leonard Cohen song/poem for the contest....sigh.
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This is great. I really appreciate the simplicity of it too that is juxtapositioned against an under lying complexity of emotion. Great visuals.
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dude, this was amazing.
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i love this.. Very nice imagery
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I noticed that you change your name to be whatever the poem's title is.
Anyways, I love your imagery here... Stunning and beautiful. Impressive like all your other poetry is.
Good luck in the contest.
~Cassie
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Ah......green...evergreen, this poem, the sound of spring and the fog (love the visuals and the build-up here). This is lovely poetry, verdir and you are one talented poet!!
~ Nicolette
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