object of my affection
i've made to u a confession
im sorry for its suppression
and for my lack of expression
i tried to ready myself procession
by askin many a question
but all of that compression
jus led to slight depression
been bottled up with guilt
and fear of breaking what we built
shaking like on a stilt
i confessed what has made me wilt
i feel like grime
and like i've waded in slime
it should have been said at an earlier time
instead of letting the clock chime
Author notes
im so sorry baby...i hope u believe me wen i say i love you
A contest entry
- The Cheaters Club by alaskanamber.
450 points, ended February 14, 2008, 24 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Mistakes? by hmmmmmmm.
440 points, ended April 26, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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There is great rhythym and rhyme to this piece. I know when I write like this I'm normally on a roll with no thesaurus in hand. Thanks for the wonderful entry and good luck.
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...........no words to explain
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I enjoyed the rhyme. Neat poem!
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I know u feel bad, but at least you got it off your chest and was honest with him about it. As for the poem it's good to get it off the chest, but if I didn't know I would wonder what you were talking about as well. So you should beat around the bush, but give readers more to go on.
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What in the wrold are you talking about? You spark ideas, but you leave the reader hanging what's up wit that? But I think you should add some more to it, and a little confrontation too but I hope you win the contest.
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lol umm thanks i guess...but ye i dnt THINK i'll win bt its worth a shot
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