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Empty Death

Lying without thought
Unreachable by all
Not that they would come
Even if I call
For I will die forgotten

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  • Blooming Poet
    March 21, 2008

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    This is definitly not your best. you need to captilize your i's. The pain and emotion is there for sure and ii guess thats what counts.