From my mother
To my daddy
Possibly a long lost brother
You gotta see it all
Gotta see all the struggle
Gotta shoot this down the alley
Gotta try this ralley
Gotta struggle, bring this bar back
Gotta ignore the jabs
Don't care about the pain
This is mind over matter
All that matters is on my mind
So I gotta make this happen
Since you can't get a good job
With a puny Bacholor's degree
But first we gotta fight
F.I.G.H.T.
F..I..G..H..T..
F.!I.!G.!H.!T.!
Fight, FIGHT, FIGHT!
My dad's in jail
My mom is dead
My fosters don't give a shit
So I gotta keep on the prowl
I musta keep up the struggle
Gotta keep my head above the water
So I gotta make this happen
Since you can't get a good job
With a puny Bacholor's degree
But first we gotta fight
F.I.G.H.T.
F..I..G..H..T..
F.!I.!G.!H.!T.!
Fight, FIGHT, FIGHT!
Still goin' to school
Also got things to do after
I don't get in trouble
Although even I run from the 5-0
I don't have a car
But I still speed
I just don't want to
FIGHT
I still go to school
Its some fuckin' bullshit
But there's no way around it
So I gotta make this happen
Since you can't get a good job
With a puny Bacholor's degree
But first we gotta fight
F.I.G.H.T.
F..I..G..H..T..
F.!I.!G.!H.!T.!
Fight, FIGHT, FIGHT!
Author notes
i wrote this back when i was an underground fighting syndacit fighter "a boxer", that was atleast 6 years ago
In a list
A contest entry
- Why Not Be Different by wingsofgold25.
900 points, ended January 30, 2008, 54 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bring It All by Simply Simple.
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Comments
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Interesting poem. Not my favorite but it was okay. Anyway, I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Thank you for the entry.
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Thank you for entering the contest good luck
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all this underlying aggression, forceful poetry F.I.G.H.T , fight fight fight! Its very confessional, very personal and at the same time has a pacifist sentiment
I felt it did have an uplifting ending- fuck that judge
so you spelt bachelor wrong,I didnt bloody notice and i have a bachelor of science and 'musta instead of must-its a typo, i didnt notice it either, and Im technical and picky... its like he completely missed the point...I didnt even notice the spelling mistakes when i first read it,because its was such an aggressive and fast paced read;
I liked:
From my mother
To my daddy
Possibly a long lost brother
You gotta see it all
Gotta see all the struggle
F.I.G.H.T.
F..I..G..H..T..
F.!I.!G.!H.!T.!
Fight, FIGHT, FIGHT!
I don't get in trouble
Although even I run from the 5-0
I don't have a car
But I still speed
I just don't want to
FIGHT
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I love the way you critique, because i honestly can't spell very well and many things I do wrong isn't on purpose. And the way you say the way I'm wrong is so sarcastic that I actually laugh!
Another reason I like it is that you actually crique, you don't just say "I Loved It" you actually explain it. If you didn't like it, you explain why.
Just a random note, musta, and words like that, is how I used to talk, it was ment to be in there, it wasn't a typo.
Thank you.
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I am not seeing the happy ending in this one. Ye olde personal preference.
You have two misspelled words it would be good to find and correct.
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aww, I didnt know you were a boxer, but good poem none the less, loved the emtions in it, and it made me want to cry at parts, good emotions portriayed,
keep writing
~Ashley~<3
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