I dream in colours and light
And awake with a smile.
An inner glow pushes back the night.
I dream in colours and light.
My unconscious world made right.
Darkness cannot beguile.
I dream in colours and light
And awake with a smile.
The morning sun's shimmering light
To the world a welcome smile.
Dawn seen from the side of night.
The morning sun's shimmering light.
Soon to bed to make things right.
To these partying eyes light does beguile.
The morning sun's shimmering light.
To the world a welcome smile.
He approaches at dawns first light,
Seductively I welcome with a smile.
Cigarettes, alcohol, perfume; smells of the night.
He approaches at dawns first light.
Snuggling, our bodies fit just right.
Odours of bartending, without trust would beguile.
He approaches at dawns first light
Seductively, I welcome with a smile.
Author notes
A triolet is a poem with a fixed rhyming sequence
A
B
a
A
a
b
A
B
A sestina simulates rhyming by using the same ending words. To combine the two forms I wrote a triolet and then used the exact same ending words for the next two triolets.
Written November 13th, 2003
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This is great! Very seductive poem!
It looks easier than a sestina, tougher than a triolet
I'll try this one and hope for the rhymes don't come to forced.
Thanks John!
Mari
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I'm contemplating why you chose to feature this poem today, I like this combining of styles. It is an amazing talent you have. I actually had to go back and reread this another time after reading your comments, because the end word thing does not force it self on you. It may because of the repetition already inherent in this style.
Anyway enough meandering.
Great write,
Susan -
excellent
Amazing workmanship on this piece, triolets, i didn't know they existed before this, i hope that you could explain more in detail about this.
On the poem though, my word what a poem, contrast in feelings darkness to the light, woman to man, fierceome images that spark the flame of inspiration within myself...
i think i shuld have another attempt at writing poetry as you've set a new standard.
Thank you for your comment on " a knightly smile" by the way i shall endeavour to improve my efforts..
john -
Very, very nicely done! Triolets can often be difficult for some to pull off...yet you did this with ease (or so it appears)
Interesting...this post and the one i read before it...you use the voice of a woman...another thing not easy for some to do...using the voice of the opposite gender...but it works here
UB
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I love the rhyme scheme, it's neat, I didn't even know what a triolet was until this. I feel so enlightened, jk. Anyway, good write.
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this is very creative! i enjoyed it very much! don't think that i could ever achieve writing something like this without a lot of thought but it's a great piece! Great work!~T~
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so dam clever and yet the flow is so smooth, which was totally perfect for your poem. wow i love this poem, could you explain this triolet to me a bit more, im a little confused.lol. great write
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Great Work
I must try this and definitely want to learn this style~Awesome write John and I have a smile on my face~ I have that smile that won't go away~ ~ Keep these coming and enjoyed this very much~ Thank you for breaking down the sequence for I will give this one a whirl...Awesome piece~ Big hugs 
and much love~Desire
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done with perfection once again.
Yvonne
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Very interesting style and a beautiful write.
Excellent job.
Sam
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