your fingers
strum across my back
tweaking sinew and flesh
like strings
on a violin
they practice
their fingering
(practice makes perfect)
bridging waist to flit
effortlessly upon navel
before striking lower chords
I am your instrument
a concerto
for your ears only
I am reed
and wind
and string
toneless
save for in your hands
where strummed by fingers -
given breath
I’m treble
and base
scaled then paused -
a symphony
awaiting your encore
Author notes
what can I say, gotta love those fingers and hands
Option #1
Quote:"It's over now, the music of the night."
A contest entry
- Quote Inspired Again by kill the lights.
600 points, ended January 27, 2008, 10 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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wow...this one simple took my breath away...don't get jealous, but I could almost feel those fingers.. . A sensuous and stimulating bit of writing.
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Always one of the best
Yes thats why you are a favourite of mine. Your work is great. I respect such poets as you very much.
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Oh my! I see why this won a trophy. I love the passion and the erotic undertone. This is penned with class. Well done!
Love,
Amera♥
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wow...
I have to say I'm in love with this poem
it's beautiful -
Loved this, beautiful and expressive. Not too simple, nor too complex. Nicely done.
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Subtle yet loud!
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well done! as they say let your finger do the talking and reading... this is music to my ear ... well written... it's amazing ...thanks for sharing
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This is a great poem. What was your motivation for writing this poem.
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I think, so often, hands are overlooked- I will tell you, it something on a man I ALWAYS look at. Give me a strong pair of able hands over a pretty face any day of the week!
I thought this was well written- excellent vocabulary and stood up to be noticed without getting too graphic. It may have 'been done before' but I found it had a unique enough voice to please me- and probably most others too.
I enjoyed the musical references and thought the form fit well with the content.
... and it was a lot of fun to read.
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Thank you so much for your comments. As you said, this has been "done before" but I'd like to think I put a bit of a different spin on it
Ruth
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I think the images and topic has been done before, and you really didn't creatively use the prompt. Your wording was nice and the tone was consistent throughout the poem.
Thanks for entering. -
that was awesome
that had alot of meaning and i could tell that it came from the heart. I am obsiously no expert but that was a wonderful poem and it had alot of meaning for me and most likely others as well. It was amazing
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