a single colorless seed sinks
through earthen top soil
- darkest confinement of life
i sprout from thick bed sheets
headfirst stretch forth pale
newborn limbs reach
toward luminate mother sunlight magnified
traverses thick-glassed translucent pane
photosynthesize
my meekest hide
morning.
how was the imagery? could you follow my shifty syntax?
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Good imagery!
I like short poems, as they must capture the essence of their subject in a limited number of words and lines. This is always a challenge and doesn't always work well in terms of the end result. However, I liked the imagery in this poem and the switch to the POV of the seedling. The alliteration is quite a tongue-twisting experience, especially when reading the poem out loud!
Dannan
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i sprout from thick bed sheets
oh man, that was beautiful. and yes, the imagery was followable.
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