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Like Architecture

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Let me pretend I came with a voice,

breathe me in like crisp Winter air

let me hang from your lips,

explore your smile 

 

inside climatic dreams I roam; watching, waiting

light filters through my head

beats of my heart counted, curling in comfort

greens and blues mingle with each other

seeking balance

 

below six feet of fate, a thousand secrets

fly on careful thoughts as time rushes past

sliding on the edge of  hope

small voices hide behind a shadow of doubt

 

my vision twists with endless distortion

falling from Winter, landing in Spring;

lying on my back in cool crisp grass counting

clouds, dissecting my confidence with small

incisions

 

I hide in the cracks of my own mind;

inside words crossing a bridge of sighs

taking small sips of life marked in moments

with wild infatuation of untold stories

 

words catch in my throat with heavy pride

a complex personality holding syllables in

deceiving myself with overwhelming silence

trying to synchronize my walk as soft notes

play the Blues for me;

 

I hide in your heart waiting for you to find me

an invisible breath inside the crack of a smile

with body and soul we collide into the shape of love

slow dancing with poetry between dreams

perfectly spilled onto smooth pages

like architecture, fully alive and beautiful

inside the rhythm of wind

 

 

 

 

 

 

Author notes

Prompt: Hiding place
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=qLtjaUNq6r8

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  • love my jose luis
    February 11, 2008

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    I reallyl ike this piece, it has so much feeling and it has so much imagery, I really like this piece, great job and good luck in my contest.
    ~Maria

  • Cinnarry gold member
    February 10, 2008
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    poetry


  • penman gold member
    February 2, 2008

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    Excellent

    Very creative and well done. So full of wonderful wording and great flow. Best of luck in the contest.


  • Tam
    January 26, 2008

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    oh Beautiful Becky

    how lovely this entire write is...falling softly with each word...your imagery is excellent...
    so many killer lines within one write...I am overwhelmed...
    your play upon words and phrasing is to die for lady!!
    great write...
    ummm...can you pen anything other than GREAT? LOL
    I think not...it has been proven!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • Cat gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    this is just beautiful- wow... the first line is just a wonderful way to start this poem

    m

  • Rowan gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    "lying on my back in cool crisp grass counting

    clouds, dissecting my confidence with small

    incisions "

    sigh. Excellent entry. I'll be back again.

  • tara wilson gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    "I hide in your heart waiting for you to find me

    an invisible breath inside the crack of a smile"

    I think this is one of your best. I love the metaphor.. beautiful poem..

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