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Coming Home

Missing image

Drawn from my body, taken away
as if in a beautiful dream.
Like a new birth, transcending the Earth,
glorious wonders, in the extreme.

Floating and free, I’m on my way home
and heaven is O so clear.
Transcending the Earth, like a new birth,
total escape with nothing to fear.

I opened my eyes and what did I see?
Saint Peter was at the door.
Like a new birth, transcending the Earth,
blessed with a glow I cannot ignore.

I entered the gate and he smiled at me
and said “Welcome home” my friend.
Transcending the Earth, like a new birth,
with a love I can now comprehend.

I passed the test of a mortal life,
now I am finally home.
Like a new birth, transcending the Earth
and a soul that no longer must roam.

So now that I’m gone please understand,
It’s you I’ll never forget.
Transcending the Earth, like a new birth,
‘twas our love I will never regret.

 

 

 

 

Author notes

ZaniLa Rhyme
The ZaniLa Rhyme, a form created by Laura Lamarca, consists 4 lines per stanza.
The rhyme scheme for this form is abcb and a syllable count of 9/7/9/9 per stanza.
Line 3 contains internal rhyme and is repeated in each odd numbered stanza.
Even stanzas contain the same line but swapped. The ZaniLa Rhyme has a minimum of 3 stanzas and no maximum poem length.
Art work: by: cosmouse

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  • Swan song gold member
    November 28, 2008
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    This is true silky smooth Amera style and who could not enjoy this lovely poem I sure did!

  • Papagallo
    February 2, 2008
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    I keep trying to give u applause and my pc won't let me

  • Papagallo
    February 2, 2008
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    well let metry again,

  • Papagallo
    February 2, 2008

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    Beautiful

    You never cease to astound me with the beauty and the amount of work you produce. Your muse is working over time. I hope that you do not burn yourself out. I did and it took me awhile to recover. You are indeed a poet. I believe you should try and get published big time. Best of Luck.

  • Papagallo
    January 25, 2008
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    This is another beautiful work of yours.


  • Laura Lamarca gold member
    January 22, 2008

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    I love the lyrical quality that this form allows with the repetition of L3 in every stanza and alternation every other stanza...I'm more proud of this creation than I am of all of my others, yet this is one so seldom used. You've done very well with it here and again, I'm proud to see someone do it justice. Thank you for linking me here, this was a pleasure to read. La x


  • second-born
    January 22, 2008

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    Wow...same with the other poems of yours...this is really wow...everytime that I read your poetry...you never fail to amaze my imagination and emotions...and this one is so lovely, uplifting and awesome...a pure delight to the soul!


  • Tam
    January 21, 2008

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    brilliant...

    form...you have mastered this difficult form with seemingly effortless grace...
    and yet the message within the perfectly executed zanila is the true masterpiece here...
    this is truly stirring poetry...
    I do pray this takes the gold!!!
    you rock beautiful!
    Blessings! Tammy


  • malmadre gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    Amera, I am always amazed with your knowledge of form, and the beautiful way you express it. Very inspirational!


  • And Hyetal
    January 21, 2008

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    I don't know what to say to this! You wrote about dying, which usually is a sad thing, but you made it happy! Only something you can do.

    You have to try MY form sometime.

    ~Cassie


  • Titus gold member
    January 21, 2008

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    This is almost greek god like, where the ethereal meets our life feel for heavenly. It's a purgatory I would love to feel when my time comes, very well done!


  • Ithica silver member
    January 20, 2008

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    I saw this form and saved it my my docs. Now that I see it again with the "Amera" touch, I like it even more! I sure hope St. Peter let's me in, I've been a bit worried lately? BeautifuL write (AS ALWAYS)


  • penman gold member
    January 20, 2008
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    Excellent

    Wonderful creation with the form. Best of luck in the contest.


  • PerVirtuous
    January 20, 2008

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    I am not familiar with this form, but it looks to be a classic example according to the notes. It is a testimonial to the power of agape. What a beautiful sentiment and how elegantly you have captured it in this form. Best of luck in the contest. I smell a winner.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Amera...dear, so timely, as you know of Moodaya's passing in Wyoming to a bullet in the back by a person trying to shoot an elder....This was just a poem for Moodayo......wonderful entry...glories to behold...and you have written, cleverly and bold...A Zanila Rhyme for him notknowing this contest rhyme would come for such a time as this.....Auntie rose


  • Faeryn
    January 20, 2008

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    this is a beyond amazing write. so perfect and beautiful. I love the lines:
    "Transcending the Earth, like a new birth,
    ‘twas our love I will never regret."

    bacckround is pretty too; very peaceful.

    -Tay


  • HaleyMary
    January 20, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Amera. This has a wonderful flow. I don't think I've read a poem that had a ZaniLa rhyme before, though. This made me think of renewal in life. Like, when we meet someone we get along with we may feel like our life changes for the better. Good luck in the contest.


  • BellaD
    January 20, 2008

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    Gorgeous Verse!

    Aaaahhhhh! So lovely. I enjoyed every word and ZaniLa Rhyme---what a great invention from Laura Lamarca.


  • StarEyes
    January 20, 2008

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    SIGH!!!!!!

    My Dearest Friend,

    I am in awe!!!! Not only was this pure beauty, but feels almost like I am invading personal thoughts, that we both share......

    "So now that I’m gone please understand,
    It’s you I’ll never forget.
    Transcending the Earth, like a new birth,
    ‘twas our love I will never regret."

    Like this was from "Our Special Angels" just for you and I! Well done for sure!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • Kelli Marie
    January 20, 2008

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    I love love love this write. Close enough to perfect for me. I hope it does well in the contest. The rhyme and flow is beautiful. Awesomely done. WOW!!!
    Kelli

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