if they could see us now...
the long breath-taking stares
feelings, swarming like a kaleidoscope of
beautiful butterflies
waking emotions that once were thought dead,
come alive with brand new meaning and purpose
if they could hear...
moans and sighs of excitement,
coming from each heated embrace, as we draw near
to old familiar signs of loves' temptations
if only they could know..
what we're doing now
they would witness...
...two entwined hearts
A contest entry
- love & romance by And Hyetal.
700 points, ended February 18, 2008, 11 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Turn your Green Trophies into Bronze, Silver or Gold (2) by FloridaGatorQueen.
600 points, ended July 17, 2008, 27 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This is such a beautiful poem. It was written with such love. It brought a smile to my face.
Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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Lovely!
a sweet poem of love returned. Nice flow and innocence.
Regards,
Jennifer
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you're very kind my friend for commenting on this one!!
SilverButterfly
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Lovely!
a sweet poem of love returned. Nice flow and innocence.
Regards,
Jennifer
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Wow, romance blooming in this one! So feminine, so emotionally powerful...The pull of one's heart is strong in this write! As butterflies are reborn from the caterpillar, so love can renew us from what we were to who we can become, when there is true love...You have beautifully thought out this and I love it. Love it!
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Beautiful! I really like how you have formatted this poem and highlighted parts for emphasis. Makes me think of two who are deeply in love. Thx for sharing! ~Heather
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Excellent
I enjoy your compositions and have placed you amongst my favorites---Also--I am glad you were able to find
"We Watched Our Mom" and could relate to it!!
She was the glue that held our family together!!
It's nice to meet you!!
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"kaleidoscope of beautiful butterflies come alive"
Great metaphor there. This poem was beautifully passionate and a wonderful read. I love the color changes... It really emphasizes what you're saying. And the bear picture is so cute!
Thank you for entering my contest!
~Cassie
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Very beautiful, love the way it flowed, the structure and even chaging the colors on makes it read different, i like
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Lovely! Kaleidoscope of butterlies....I had used in a poem of mine...so the words registered immmediately...Very lovely, passionate...Love alive.....I do not know if you read my poems....but it seems that minds can think alike, and perhaps you did read some of my poems......Great write, with cute loving graphics....
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Mary this is just heart warming.
It was such a beautifully written poem my friend
What a precious love poem.
thank you for sharing this
God Bless You
Delane
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So romantic and beautiful. Well written with an endearing picture. So sweet are those little bears. Cuter than the care bears..lol I hope you do well in the contest.
Kelli
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