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thirteen

again reaching for the mask.
shutting myself out again.
and again she cries.

Author notes

i have this thing about the word 'again'.

i don't know why.

wasn't sure if the word in the title counted.
i presumed it did not.

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  • Kelli Marie
    January 20, 2008

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    Something repeitive words work and sometimes they don't...I think this is one of the times they do. Good luck.
    Kelli


  • Naridill
    January 20, 2008

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    No, title doesn't count
    I feel the 'again' is a little repetitive but also found it worked well, the flow drove within it and created beautiful imagery.

    Thanks for entering,