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[ Floating around this ]

Floating around this
Clear morning
Orange blossoms glare
A twisted reflection
And we're all just
Soap in a fishbowl

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My mind's not here

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  • MenschMariah
    April 2

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    Romantic Imagery.

    Wow Ok now I'm hooked. Soap in a fishbowl sounds like the to be name for my to be band Dead Fish on A Fork lol...I've drawn that picture for years now...poor fishy! but to mixed something so beautifully morbid with orange blossoms that are angery and clear mornings is brilliant! I just can see my poor dead fishy floating around in a soapy grave bowl...
    I would end up naming him Fred because that's what I name everything dead. Except when I found a squirrel in the yard and didn't know what sex it was I named her Rainbow for girl and Tony for male...
    poor Rainbow slash Tony!!!

    Kudo's!


    • Naznomarn
      April 2

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      Thank you greatly! I was pretty... ill that day and just had things to write. And that's what I wrote ^_^
      Poor Tony/Rainbow!
      I found a dead kitty the other day T_T That made me sad
      But yes. Dead Fred
      Have you ever seen the Dead Fred line of goods? >.>


  • MissCassie
    January 27, 2008

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    I get it in a different way than you get it
    get it?


    • Naznomarn
      January 28, 2008
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      hehe I actually don't get it at all
      I was just coming up with b/s that sounded good [=


  • Leela
    January 27, 2008

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    lyrical

    i get an impression of winter even though there is an orange blossom involved...not sure why. maybe because it is winter, i'm so simple. your poem describes beauty with a hint of dark irritating features, an interesting way to go...it definitely captures a mood. so one thing in particular i want to discuss, "soap in a fishbowl" were we once fish and later finding more happiness as soap but missing our lives as fish we return to the bowl?? hehe just wondering..maybe it's an inside joke?

    • Naznomarn
      January 27, 2008
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      I was like completely not there at all. That was the day I passed out I think and then it took a few days to re-attach itself


  • Angel Full Of Hurt
    January 23, 2008

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    soap in a fishbowl? lol

    LOL you have a beautiful presence whether ur mind is there or not lol...your poem is nicely done lol i dunno why but the soap in a fishbowl tickles me lol..cute write you darling little kitty cat lol

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