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Drowning

I'll always remember
splashing through
twisted vines in a
horrid forest trying
to find my way out
just to make sure
I was still breathing.

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  • AJ Morelli gold member
    February 4, 2008
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    "horrid forest" I like that, thanks for entering...


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  • Rowan gold member
    January 21, 2008
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    ... yes, a scary dream-like feel to this.


  • catz Moderators member
    January 20, 2008

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    This is like a dreadful dream... being lost, can't breath, drowning in our own self doubts.
    A good piece Well written and nice presentation.

    Good luck in the contest

    Dee

  • wendymolly
    January 20, 2008

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    I can relate to this very well, I think there are many forms of such feelings. great way to get it out!

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