Beautiful girl, drenched in shadow,
cloaked in the darkest shade of night.
The thunder pounds upon her weary soul,
and the gods scream for an encore, as she
dances to the beat of her own broken heart.
Torridly twisting to sorrow's symphony,
waltzing slowly into madness, she breaks,
and with a last, lonely arabesque, this
twisted princess takes her final bow
amid tumultuous applause.
Author notes
Picture-inspired: "Shadow Within" by Cris Ortega.
I was a ballerina myself, and I can completely relate to the amount of pressure they put on dancers to be these perfect, enigmatic beings. The picture was beautiful, and it spoke to me, so I thought I'd write this for you. Enjoy!
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A contest entry
- PICTURE PROMPT II - 10 ENTRIES/10 LINES by ShelleyA.
750 points, ended January 20, 2008, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I think the title was really good, and the poem served it well. Thanks for entering and good luck in the contest.
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This poem has quite some dark edges to it, but I really like the way you managed to bring that to the reader, using the imagery in your words
The alliteration is a very nice touch of detail as well
thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the very best!
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Totally deserved that gold for this!! Went and took a look at the pic... this was wicked girl! Almost tragic!
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Great title. Lovely form. Very good imagery, flow and tone. Deep expression of emotion. You capture the lot of the ballerina. Vivid descriptives. Good word choice, alliteration and assonance. Thank you for your entry.
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i like it its awsome u used just the right wrds to move anyone who is reading it amazing XD
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