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In Memory Of A Great Warrior Black Crow

 

In a cloud of gentle words he rode into my life,
We spoke of many things and laughed a lot.
Together we shared wine, pizza and cheese,
Yet we never spent a second of it in person.
He came to me when I needed him most,
His words touched my heart as did he.
On Thanksgiving Day he honored me,
When he asked me to accept him as my Hetane.
I did this with pride as I knew his kind heart,
And whenever we could we’d enjoy being together.
He touched my heart and gave me back the words,
Those which had been lost for many years.
Now those words will hold a different meaning,
As now the light in my life has gone out.
My Hetane, Moodayo-Okohke has been taken,
Taken by a bullet meant for the Elder.
He died the Warrior’s death they say,
But I am not suppose to shed tears for him.
I am to show pride in his death as a Warrior,
But this is much to difficult for me.
I cry for him as my friend, one whom I love,
I shall cry for his people whom he loved.
We have lost a great friend and Warrior today,
And I will never forget him in days to come.

He died today but he will always be
MY HETANE
MY WARRIOR
BLACK CROW

I will always be
HIS HEMEOONE
HIS LADY
HIS LITTLE ELF

 

 

Author notes

My Hetane, Moodayo-Okohke was killed January 19, 2008. He died a Warriors death doing what he was born to do. He has left us but he shall never be forgotton. I was proud to be his Hemeoone and to have him as my Hetane. We were not together long but he will be mine for eternity now, for before he left me, the day before he died, he gave me his heart, and I shall forever cherish it.

The day before he died he posted this link on his page. If you want to know more take a listen to it
http://youtube.com/watch?v=PGlf6bbuihs&feature=related

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  • TheQuietStorm
    February 6, 2008

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    this is very sad but i really like it! you express your feelings fantastically in this poem! thank you for entering and good luck!
    NineTailedFox


  • FreeFalling911
    January 30, 2008
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    amazing write... i can see that you really love this person through your poetry


  • Mudasssar.rana
    January 27, 2008
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    nice that is true lov


  • Talking Toni gold member
    January 26, 2008

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    So Sad...............

    but a beautiful tribute..my loneliness pales in comparison to losing a loved one. You wrote a lovely tribute for him and your love and respect for each other shines through in this piece you have penned so eloquently!! Thanks for sharing your heart with me tonight and I hope yours will soon begin to heal by the memories of love and happiness you shared in your short time together!!!~~


  • Gagiikwe
    January 26, 2008

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    All those that have commented before have said it, and better.
    Niaish for a heartfelt song to your valued friend.


  • Polaja Greeters member
    January 25, 2008

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    This poem is sadly beautiful... your words show the love and pain that you feel so well that the reader would have to have a heart of stone to feel nothing... This is a magnificent tribute

    Keep writing

    Polly


  • ronnica
    January 25, 2008

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    You have penned a fitting tribute to a friend,almost a romance but nor quite,I suppose that is how true friendship is .
    you made it flow and reach the reader with sadness


  • warrior-eagle
    January 25, 2008

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    whats a hetane and the other words?
    By the way this was very sad yet
    very sweet.
    Liked it.

    ...Simply Me♥

    P.S
    God Bless you.


  • Shamanicmusings
    January 23, 2008

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    This a beautiful, significant tribute for a good friend and in the Viking world, he would have stood as Oath giver and blood brother. I hope this is close to the honorific that you had with your hetane.


  • paperparadox silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    Such a sad story, but at least you have some happy times to hold on to.

    This is a fitting tribute, I think, to his memory.

    Well written .


  • Lost Memory
    January 22, 2008

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    for unknown reasons, horrid things happen to great people. It is always hard to lose a friend, a loved one, and often, as time moves on, the heart wants to stay behind, lingering in the memories. Yet that is not always the wisest thing to do. My advice: never forget, but dont dwell on the past.
    My wishes in luck to you

    ~Nick

  • Oya Ayaba Nikua
    January 22, 2008
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  • rite gold member
    January 22, 2008

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    A chill runs down my spine when reading this. On the very same day I posted this:
    http://allpoetry.com/poem/3818297

    For many years I had a deep relation with a woman of Comanche descent who lived on the edge of a reservation in Wisconsin. Although 10,000 miles apart the bond between our souls was deep. I learned things that would otherwise not have been added to my awareness. I recognize the courage in Black Crow's conduct well, since this mix of fierceness and kindness I had the privilege to share as well.

    I wish you strength to cope with your loss and the nearness of his spirit throughout your life. Thank you for creating and sharing. Take care,

    Chris


  • Doomsday Clock
    January 22, 2008
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    Merry meet, merry part and one day, you will merry meet again.

    A very beautiful and touching tribute to someone who obviously was the sun and moon to you. And the pride that is shown within these words is wonderful.
    A marvellous piece, I can't rate it high enough.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    January 22, 2008

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    A fine tribute to the Man,the Warrior,the Love of your life, it does not take a legal ceremony for you to remain his Hemeoone and for him, him to remain your Hetane, true love is never lost by being parted, it makes the next meeting sweeter,though the sadness of his journey taken before you is felt,you have not lost him,but carry him within you as a weight which will get lighter with time,you honour him as he honoured you.Carry the weight well,it will lead to the Path of Light and again you will greet the Man,the Warrior,the Love of your life.

  • JustBreathe
    January 22, 2008

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    Such a touching tribute to someone who meant so much to you. No words can ease the pain of your loss of your friend right now, but time will soften its sting. I did not know Black Crow, but I can see through your words that he left a legacy of kindness and caring for those whose paths he crossed. For you, he helped you regain your voice ...
    "He touched my heart and gave me back the words,
    Those which had been lost for many years."

    Be blessed with peace and comforting memories ... JustBreathe


  • leander gold member
    January 22, 2008
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    This is a very beautiful tribute you have written here. I'm not familiar to be honest with this person

    Or have I caught this complete in the wrong way...

    Anyway, as I mentioned before, you've written a very beautiful and touching tribute to this person!

    Leander


  • Poetry and I Inc
    January 22, 2008
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    What a heartfelt tribute
    to the one you admire and cherish
    so much. I won't pretend to
    know the proper speech to give
    in his honour and in your pang:
    so I won't try. As is the custom
    of our people *Native Americans*
    you are right: Pride is shown.

    Thank you much for sharing,
    Keep penning!

    ~The Inc."

  • Nighttime angel
    January 22, 2008

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    this is a beautiful and sad poem that you have written in memory of him. I am sorry that he passed away. He will be missed dearly.

    kat


  • Shari-Lei gold member
    January 21, 2008
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  • storiesuntold
    January 21, 2008
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    My condolences

    Such a precious write for the one you love and a friend


  • Bizharro
    January 21, 2008
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    I really enjoyed this poem. Though very sad, I love the story that is portrayed.


  • Prison of Lyme
    January 21, 2008

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    beautiful

    this is a great tribute of sorts. I think it was vey heart felt. Good luck to you and take care.


  • The Hermit
    January 21, 2008

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    Great Background. I am so sorry about that. He sounded like a great man that I would've wanted to meet. Great poem and a great tribute

  • Susan E. Pennycuff
    January 21, 2008

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    There is no words that I can say that will erase the pain you feel today. So I will stop and pray and ask my Lord to give you comfort little by little each day.
    You have written a tribute that shines of a warrior whos memory will remain in hearts untainted and sublime. May you be blessed as you allow his spirit to guide you and know that his love was always true.


  • arafura
    January 21, 2008

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    He spoke to me on the day before... I can't say much just now because my heart bleeds too. I just want to say I understand and I am here.


  • ScottishPrincess silver member
    January 20, 2008

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    I am sorry to hear of your friends passing,this is just a beautiful tribute and you know your friend will always be with you in your heart and spirit,Hazel


  • LarryATilander
    January 20, 2008

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    Sorry to hear that someone died.

    I can't find the unusual words that you use except at Allpoetry. For somone who is a First Nations person to have the name Black Crow is rather ironic as Black Crow is what they called the Catholic priests who took the most away from them. It is time the First Nations question was settled, but there is a lot of giving to be done on both sides. Peace.


  • Rose Angel gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Dear Sis,,,I share your sorrow...YOu knew him longer than me by a few months,,He was so loyal and loved his AP family...loved you, and and all.You have written a lovely poem..I know he would smile..I know he is waiting for a reunion with us, and to see us in person. I was his Beautiful Rose...the name he gave me...And he was our Warrior and your Hetane.....I embrace you over the miles...What a beautiful honor to him...He sees us now....from heaven.....and when rewards are given, he will receive many,,,,What a servant, What a Warrior....what a teacher of kindness and love! Precious write!


  • Standing Owl gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Amazing Tribute For Your Love

    Having read this before, I am still moved by your words of honor and tribute. The ease with which you share your intimacy is born of a bond, that will last for the ages.

    To find another, who can touch one's soul from a distance, is a rarity. For few can believe in the validity of such. As one who has felt the same for another, I can relate to your words of love.

    I am grateful for your willingness to share of your heart with each of us. Thank you for allowing this insight into you and him, with the bonds you shared.

  • Francis Vincent
    January 20, 2008

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    very good

    bursts of sincrerity, love, compassion, committment, loyalyty, valor, courage, etc
    in the beginning, i figured norway viking
    but, then
    "Together we shared wine, pizza and cheese,"
    so, it a now theme
    your willingness to keep the memory of him for eternity is truly the "viking queen" you got in you
    terrific write


  • MlilAngel
    January 20, 2008

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    warmed my heart

    This is incredibly touching. I love how you related the joy of him asking him to be your hetane to how you lost him. It is an intense connection that you've shown and I just hope that you recover from your loss with ease. Wonderful, beautiful write!

    *M'lilangel*


  • quack silver member
    January 20, 2008
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    im sorry you lost him hugggggggggggggggs you tight
    love rhianna


  • CountryCousin
    January 20, 2008

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    Very powerful.

    This is sad and written so beautifully, I do not believe that true love ever dies as it goes on and it waits for you to come to him in the afterlife. How did he die was it in a battle here or in another country.


  • Shadow Life
    January 20, 2008

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    It made me cry to think of this. I've not been around long enough to experience a lot in life, so I can only imagine the pain, Was a beautiful, powerful poem.

  • Acidanthra
    January 20, 2008

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    I ache to hear of a love passing. You used coping with poetry which I respect dearly. You wrote this poem with such heart and soul that the pen was filled with magic as it was being used. The day before his passing he gave you his heart. Eternally you will be his and never forget it. Keep your love strong and stay in tune while you are still alive and you will feel the happiness that we are meant to inhale. Great write, dear!


  • Emerald Dog
    January 20, 2008

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    Freespirit51, my heart goes out to you and your family. This is an immediate and very moving tribute to a man who clearly fought for the rights and freedoms of one of this planet’s great peoples. To have to do this disgraces so many others. May his spirit soar on clever wings.

    Love & Peace,

    Kezz


  • Gods-Artgal
    January 20, 2008

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    I like this poem very much. But do not understand it with some of these words like: hetane, moodayo-okohke, hemeoone. Would you mind telling me what they mean. Please.


  • Ktulu Blackwolfe silver member
    January 20, 2008

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    Mom

    I know that this is hard for you and although you never spent one second together in person, in mind and heart you have loved and will continue to...

    Remember him as he was...YOUR HETANE,
    YOUR WARRIOR,

    BLACK CROW

    Love
    your son
    Patrick


  • adios muchachos
    January 20, 2008

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    Dear Free Spirit

    Such a heartfelt discourse for a friend, companion and champion.
    They say that in the vast world to come that our steps become more limber, our eyesight keener, and our thoughts more lofty.
    I wish those things for your friend, and for you, and me.

    Until such a time when friends reunite, strength, strength, strength!

    John-Las Vegas, Nevada


  • Soulful Woman silver member
    January 20, 2008

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    My sister, Little Wind
    I find no words to express how I feel at this moment. Black Crow was a wonderful friend to me. I know that you both shared something special and feel your pain.
    Be strong in your beliefs and know that he died as he lived, a Warrior.
    Your sister, Little White Wolf
    Soulful Woman

  • davidwright silver member
    January 20, 2008
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    Very sad story one that rocks the heart. My condolenses for your loss. Keep the faith


  • WolfHeart
    January 20, 2008

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    Fascinating. I love to learn new words and cultures. This is a fine tribute to your Hetana. may Great Spirit hold him close and may he ride open prairies. Very touching.

    Wolfie

  • Bob Fox
    January 20, 2008

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    Ann

    I am so sorry. Rose angel also wrote a poem about the sad event but would not say who it was for. The world is hard & tragic & sadly we seem to shelter ourselves & not live believing that tme is forever. Sorry my friend


  • Count Orlok
    January 20, 2008

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    The black crow is a harbinger of death. I have ripped the throats out of many a crow, raven and rook, relishing their avian blood. I liked this metaphor.

  • Whispering Wind gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Spoken from the heart of a true Cheyeene Woman! We will grieve my sister but we to shall stand proud. He will always be remembered as a true Warrior and friend to all. He stood for right and freedom! His life he gave with much pride.

    Moodayo- Okohke  my friend and your Hetane will live again!...The Seven Nations are rising*hug* I am here LITTLE WIND *hug*


  • Nevel
    January 20, 2008

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    Dear Freespirit51, let me first condolate you with the death of your loving one.I'm really speechless about what happened.This must hurt a lot,and I really wishes your all strengh you can get.I guess whole AP will mourning with you.He died trully a warrior's death,and I'm proud to know him for a little time.He was a man with much honor,defending the rights of his people.You poem is,beyond doubt,a excellent and beautiful tribute to a real warrior and your loving one.Take much care of yourself.Sincerely, Erwin

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