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Not So That Anyone Can See

Ripped from me
Can't you see
You've torn apart
My poor heart
Subliminally


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  • michichoeret
    January 26, 2008
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    great write

  • a u r a
    January 22, 2008

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    excellent

    'Ripped '- this word in itself is so powerful and strong-when the heart is torn ,'subliminally'-how do you expect it to be seen -the rip was an operation which was below the threshold of your consciousness-an intense influence on your very being-this poem evokes heart ripping sentiments which go deep into the core of the heart


  • Naridill
    January 20, 2008

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    Nawr ~ beautiful and sad - the reflections in this are steep and painfully worded. Nicely done.

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