Oh God
you do accomplish into my domicile with me
favoring me to perceive my fortune
evidently I am the householder
yet I am continuing like the immigrant here
I know them by the beginning letter of their identities
however, they do not know me even as my shade
what else I can comprehend about my position
when everybody described me that you formulate the results
Oh God...
Author notes
Prompt
+)Tell me how life can be so hard, but in the end, it's always worth living. What would I miss if I were to leave? (Note: I am not suicidal in any way
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A contest entry
- Affective Effects by FlurryOfDancingFire.
525 points, ended March 5, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Intriguing
Very nice spin on the prompt; you used it well. I must say that my favorites lines were
"I know them by the beginning letter of their identities
however, they do not know me even as my shade"
This is full of metaphors and tricky word menaings. I had to read it about thrice through to really comprehend it. But, all in all, it was worth the time to re-read. Commendably done! Good luck in my contest.
~Flurry
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Great poem, intriguing picture you used with it. Best of luck in the contest.
♥
whisper
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Deep thinking .You have the art of giving a meaningful poem with A,B,C ,D pictures.Great!
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