FOR EVER LOSE
When I see you I want to hold you and never let you go,
This feeling I have for you no one must know.
Even you, who make me, lose control,
Will never know how you taunt my soul.
I’ll never tell you how you make me feel,
You see, you won’t believe it’s for real.
I know we will never be lovers,
We’ll never get a chance to touch each another.
All the years I’ve known you have quietly gone by,
Without you realizing how I feel inside.
We talked about every thing that happens in your life,
And if your hurting I try to make things right.
To hold you in my arms would be a dream come true,
I would probably come apart and not know what to do.
Fantasy of you I have from day to day
Hoping they will never go away.
I must hide my feeling from everyone I know,
They must never know how I love you so.
This is a feeling that I must always keep inside,
So in my fantasy you will survive.
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Comments
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good
great write. keep it up!
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Powerful pain here. I have been through these kind of feeleings ohh to many times. i really like this part: When I see you I want to hold you and never let you go, This feeling I have for you no one must know. Even you, who make me, lose control, Will never know how you taunt my soul. great start to an amazing poem
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WOW! this is amazing! i can really relate to this poem! thanks for the entry!
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One of the worst feelings in the world is standing by and watching someone love someone else, or watching them knowing you can't be together with them nor tell them how you feel. It's like that quote you are so alone even when you are sitting beside them, because you can't hold them...
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thank you for your kind words
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Great job with the ryhmning ... I think we all have felt this way before. :
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