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I will remember you

I will remember you,
this man i barely knew,
carrying a title of love and warmth-
unable to carry it threw

I will remember you,
one whose anger scorned all,
her heart meant well i'm sure
but again, someone had to fall

I will remember you
the sweetheart of my life
trying so hard to make it last
bleeding from deceitful's knife

I will remember you
my first ride in a plane
my first walk thru the road of happiness
climbing boulders was our game

I will remember you,
the one who stole my heart,
lead me to believe you were the one
then tore my life apart.

I will remember you
the one who gave me strength
gave me permission to be myself
stood up for me to every length

I will remember you,
as a beautiful shining star,
standing out amongst the crowd
knowing exactly who you are.

I will remember you
the brother i should have had
bestest friend but so different between
always got eachothers back

for even though it has been painful
i want to thank you all so very much
for letting me walk thru life
eyes wide open before they finally touch

my stories will be shared
in the writings that i expose
hoping one day all eyes will see
and bury all worldwide woes










Author notes

i am going to be writing this for a while. i think it will be one of those poems that as i keep remembering things about people i will add another stanza, however, one day bringing it all to the conclusion.

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  • Symphony
    February 17

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    Interesting;

    For me, this was a little too long, and a little repetitive, BUT with that mentioned -

    Each verse had something important and meaningful to say, and for that reason, was worthwhile -

    Thank you for entering and sharing this with us all

  • robert bolin
    February 12, 2008

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    These words -- Brought many tears to my eyes
    As I pictured every word over, and over again
    As they were words that have stung me through and through over the past year from my fallen heart
    To my soon to be ex, Definately would say very powerful


  • Angel With No Halo
    February 1, 2008
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    your feelings show very deeply in this write. It is constant,a story unfolding into a darkness, maybe one day into a window of light. I do hope you keep writing this. It is very intense. Great work. Thank you for entering and making this title all your own.

    ~Krys~


  • ImUrFadingMemory
    January 28, 2008

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    Great write!

    Wow. I'm very stunned, I love the flow of this, and its very personal. You covered alot of feelings in each stanze and each one was very descriptive and informative. I love this very much and you were consistant with using the title in every stanze [besides last two] keeping the title in it, makes it fit very well together. This is very sad, but there is light in it for being thankful, though you can always miss/remember someone no matter the feelings.
    I'm surprised no other comments! this is agreat piece! Great job!
    ~Madison~


    • Summer Dawn
      January 28, 2008
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      hi madi, thanks. yeah, one of them that could probly use a little more, who knows. but i'm gonna add more remembrances as the years go by. thanks for enjoying and reading my poem. i shall stop over to view u one day, lol. i just dont get around to reading and stuff like i used to, you know. ttyl
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