I'm still waiting to know you
As quick as clarity comes, it goes
Open is the heart I've tried to show you
But your truth is hidden, God only knows.
I will keep waiting for you
even though my trust is weakend by broken hope
My soul somehow knows yours is in pain,
hiding fear of rejecting a heart that won't cope
So when your soul aches, yearning love and affection,
please let your heart blinkers reveal its direction.
Author notes
4. "Will you hear what I have to say? Did I mention when I see you it stings like hell?" - "Attention" by The Academy Is...
A contest entry
- Prompt/10/10 by AliceinPoetryLand.
900 points, ended January 20, 2008, 6 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prompt Contest. (A) by OhNoChastity.
600 points, ended April 6, 2008, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Confusion by Zerstort.
350 points, ended April 8, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Although I feel like generally the poem applied to the feeling in the prompty, I really feel like the specifics were ignored. Understandably, considering it was a pre-write. I think there were probably better quotes that could've been used.
However, this does not mean the poem is bad at all. It's a sad poem, yet another one about a broken heart, and I do feel like it captured the tone of the quote and the general idea of feeling ignored (though not really in the sense of words or expression which I feel is an essential aspect of the quote) and in pain due to someone else. (More confusion, however.)
My favourite line would have to be "Even though my trust is weakened by broken hope". This line is amazing, and such a truth that not many can capture in words. Sometimes other emotions do get in the way of sensibility and trust.
Thank you for entering your poem. Keep up the writing and hopefully I will see you in another contest soon! -
This is a really lovely write! Thank you so much for your entry
Gaylene
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Thank you for the honorable mention. It is especially encouraging as I can tell by your poetry that you are a talented writer and your opinion means a lot. A fun contest. Thanks
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