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My Name is Marco and I'm Looking For You

My name is Marco and I'm looking for you...


First, a little about me...

I was born on the small island of Santarini; a place of wonder where the warmth of the Mediterranean sun flows through my veins. I have the body of a true Greek God, flowing black hair, deep blue eyes, soft olive skin, muscles well defined. Within this temple beats the heart of a poet, filled with tender romantic thoughts I am saving for you...

 
I love to feel the wind blow through my hair as I explore the beauty of my home with someone special riding behind me on my bike. The feel of leather as it caresses my skin and the touch of your breath against my cheek.
 

My one desire is to find my soulmate, my one true love
and I think it might be you.


Are you waiting to be swept off your feet?
Do you dream of nights spent held in loving arms?
Will you let me take you to Paradise, my lovely one?


For you, sweet and beautiful lady
as a mark of my intentions...

To hold you in my arms
beneath a starlit sky
gazing into your eyes
and seeing heaven there

I will make your every desire
your every wish come true
as I take you on a journey
through the joys of passion

I'll make love to you
with my body and my mind
whispered words from my heart
to set your soul on fire



With pounding heart, I await your answer to my call.
I know you are out there somewhere, just waiting
for me to hold you, caress you and take your breath away.


I have enclosed a photograph of myself. I truly hope you like it.









Author notes

The Erotic Challenge (Round 1 Season 5)

I chose to make Marco a sweet, romantic man who knows how to woo his woman. I'm sure I can teach him a few things when we become better acquainted.

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  • PassionsPromise gold member
    January 23, 2008

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    OH WOW. ALl I can say about this one.
    Well penned and you took the challenge and ran with it. Lets get to the scores, good luck.

    Spelling/grammar: 20
    Presentation: 20
    Originality: 20
    How well handled challenge: 20
    Overall-20

    Total: 100 Woohoo congratulations on a perfect score. Good luck in this challenge.

    Passions


  • shimmer
    January 23, 2008

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    spelling/grammar=20
    presentation=20
    originality=20
    how well you handled challenge=20
    overall=20

    total=100

    only thing wrong now is theres no address or number to contact him....


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    January 22, 2008

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    My score for your round one entry

    spelling/grammar - 20
    presentation - 20
    originality - 20
    how well you handled challenge - 20
    overall - 20
    _____________________________

    Total -100


  • Tattboyspet
    January 22, 2008

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    Spelling and grammar = 20
    Presentation = 20
    Originality = 18
    'Grab Me' Effect = 20
    Overall = 18
    TOTAL = 96/100

    Your picture insertion definitely added to the advert - well done!
    This was completely different - soft, sweet and sensual, but it didn't really grab me much - sorry!


  • shimmer
    January 21, 2008
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    he sounds great but alas he didnt tell his age and what age he is looking for so i guess i am too old to apply, just my luck.
    this is painted in romance and works well for the challenge. you did a good job here.


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      January 21, 2008
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      Thank you very much for your comment. I think Marco is the type of man who really isn't concerned by age. From his picture I would have to say he's at least 30 but coming from a small island community he may have been a little sheltered from the world. I have a feeling all that will change when he gets some replies to his advertisement, don't you?

      Margaret


  • Tattboyspet
    January 21, 2008
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    This is the first write that I have come across that is sweet and romantic and I commend you on your originality
    Your last line, however, did take away from this write for me ... it almost had a pleading lilt to it - as though he was desperate for companionship. (Not quite sure if that was meant)


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      January 21, 2008

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      Thank you so much for your comment and for looking into my words. No, I didn't intend for Marco to be pleading. I don't think he's desperate for companionship but he does know that She is out there somewhere and he really wants to find her, so maybe there could be a hint of desperation below the surface; it's all a matter of interpretation I guess.

      Margaret


      • Tattboyspet
        January 21, 2008
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        ah, I see that you have referred to her with a capital - does that mean he is looking for a Domme / Mistress or just a soul mate? (lol! not that there's much difference in my eyes though )


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Nice write and I wish you the best of luck in this challenge


  • Master Ktulu silver member
    January 20, 2008
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    Absolutely wonderful. Loved the pic too, that added a special touch to it as well.

    I especially liked this one, because as I read it I caould envision it all, right down to the accent. So kudos to you on that because that is something that is not easy.

    I will return when the deadline comes to re-read and score.

    **Master Ktulu**


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      January 20, 2008
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      Thank you

      I just decided to go with what I felt was right and Marco is the man I would envision as my perfect lover, for now at least. I realise that I didn't step too far outside my comfort zone but I figure you will find many opportunities for me to do that during the course of the challenge and I look forward to that

      Margaret


  • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
    January 19, 2008

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    Hehehehe ohhh this is different but I am in love with it and I think I want me some Marco lol

    You have done great work here and I know for the rest of the challenge will produce masterpieces


    Cin


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      January 20, 2008
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      Baby Girl, every time I look at that picture my heart skips a beat. You know how I feel about men in tight leather pants and what happens when they wrap their legs around something warm and throbbing

      Thank you for your wonderful comment. Like I always say...like Mother like Daughter

      Love you



      • MaMa-2-be-Cindy
        January 20, 2008
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        mmmm mmmm mmmm I couldnt help it, I had to have another look and reply lol

        Way to yummy, a man in tight pants is definetly irresiable

        *love
        Cin

  • Bel Ange silver member
    January 19, 2008

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    i wold ask if i cold hav one but i alredy got one of my own exept he no 6ft he only 5ft 10
    but he is vry passionet and vry traditonaly europen and he litrely swept me of my feet.
    eyes like pool liquid choclate thet you jus lose youself in
    good luck in teh contest no thet you goin to need it.

    bel ange
    jan ♥


    • Margaret Denham gold member
      January 20, 2008
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      That would be just greedy sweetheart As I said to Cin, you too know the effect leather pants and motor bikes have on me...just can't help myself. It was a close call between Marco and Marcus but I didn't feel comfortable using the picture of our gorgeous Frenchman. Now it's up to you to arrange the holiday/visit to you times to suit us both

      Thank you for your wonderful comment

      Margaret


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