Welcome,
Come sit in front of my humble fire.
Please don’t mind the dust and dirt,
They are reminders of past pain and hurt.
Make yourself at home,
Pull up a chair.
By the way I love your hair.
Take what ever you want from the fridge,
But it may be spoiled.
There are worms and caterpillars
Roaches and mice.
Reptiles and blood,
But don’t worry they’ll be nice.
You can enter any room you like
But beware of the second door on the right.
There are monsters of darkness and fright.
An assortment of things that go bump in the night
And a mad murderer with a knife.
You’ll never mange to get out with your life.
As you walk across the floor
You’ll hear creaks and roars.
Squeaks and scuttles,
And the rattling of old doors.
But no matter what you see or hear,
Never get on all fours.
If you happen to glace past the tinted windowpane.
You may see my fear and my pain.
Of ghoulish memories buried to remain.
Devilish dogs with lion manes.
A hangman’s noose in the tree,
By the way what’s your name?
If you creep with care,
Up the stairs of longing and dispair.
You will find memories mummified in lost love.
Flitting in the rafters ever so quietly,
Is a snow-white dove.
I caution you to never run.
If you look to your left,
You’ll see a door untouched,
Ever marred by love and lust.
Bloodstained floors and heartfelt notes
Walls echoing my silent screams
But whatever you do, don’t have a look.
While you were looking,
And while you were peeking,
I took you as a dinner guest,
But not of the normal standards.
Do not fret, you have not changed yet.
By the way have you noticed those marks on your neck?
Author notes
I didnt know if you wanted everyone to put the link to a pic here, so im gonna do it anyway here it is:
http://cailla.deviantart.com/art/Scary-House-72090670
And my page:
http://allpoetry.com/xXxWhite-NoisexXx
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Comments
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You mix a lot of contrasting imagery here in an intriguing way. There is a voice of hospitality and yet there is the undertone of menace and creepiness. Very interesting piece. Enjoyable read.
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I liked this poem, I just think that the color of the writing is kind of hard to read on this background.
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At first i didn't know what to say ~ I'm like ~ Did I just read ~ what ... I read ~ It's meter is right off the charts ~ you held me line for line ~ although you didn't stick to a format ~ it seems to change lines ~ to suit for the rhyme ~ ~ the rhyme was done very well~ and doesn't seem to be forced ~ You give it that Hotel California type feel ~ the type of place I don't wanna go ~ for fear I'll never return ~
Thanks for entering the "Set the Bar" Contest ~ It was a heart pounding intense read ~ I do appreciate you sharing your work with me ~ best of luck to you! -
woah.. Woah! WOAH! dramatic! i'm diggin' this one cuz it's so sarcastic and easy.. and creepy, and imaginative all at the same time... wow.. Great job.
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This is good. I like how your rhyme scheme differs slightly as you go along. Thanks for entering!
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LOL
I'm sorry. I had to laugh. I just love the last stanza and find it at least mildly humorous.
Intriguing story in poetic form.
Thanks for entering!
"by the way have you noticed those marks on your neck?"
LMAO!
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Awesome
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omg that is amazing. its---it--- i dunno. its just flipping amazing. WE NEED TO FIND A CONTEST, THIS WOULD WIN!
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