I spill some wine on the bear rug
In front of the fireplace
Earth Wind and Fire in the background
As I awkwardly say, 'Damn, you are so fine'
Your breath is hot against my neck
My fingers knead your shoulder blades
As Philip Bailey hits a high note
Is it mere coincidence,
Some random happenstance
That you're in my favourite colour?
I swim in your eyes
Saliva on your thighs
And your husky sighs-- oh my! I holler!
No wonder I tilt my flute,
Spill some red wine
Upon the bear rug we lay upon
In front of the fireplace
As 70s love songs
Declare, better than I've ever hoped I could,
That you are so fine.
A contest entry
- Picture perfect by Alexis Manley.
380 points, ended January 20, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Comments
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wow...im not sure what to make of this peom... ...but i know that it had a very good visual tho! keep up the good work and good luck in the contest!!! -Gore
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Wondeful
Though I tend to shy away from love poems I must say this one caught my eye. Songs of the 70s. I like that. Makes me wish I could go back
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cool. i love romance and whatever happens to come with it. great job... i love that you categorized this under "hope." awesome. great poem and good luck in the contest.
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Yes! This picture is perfect! Did you happen to video tape the courtship I had with my husband in 1972? Sure as hell sounds like it. "Earth, Wind & Fire" one of my favorites as well. Loved this! I am taken aback. Think I'll ravage Ray when he gets in from work this evening. LOL
The best to you in the contest!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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There is something so familiar about this piece... aside from the bear rug (because it would be a cold day in hell before I ever had a rug made out of an animal).
I think I've seen a moment or two like this one before. 70's love songs go very well with spilled wine and a little eye swimming.
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good luck!
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hm. i like it... but then i dont... but dont let my indecision think this peice isnt good, because it is... theres just something about it that could be better, but i cant figure it out... i wish it was longer! ha i figured it out. oops sorry im rambling. good luck in the contest.
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should enter my other contest, this piece is very sensuos, i love it! Great write! Best Wishes,
-Pink Torrid Kitten
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