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Psycho On A Deserted Island

I can feel him,

breathing upon my skin

as my soul is clenched,

trembling in the wait.

I know he is out there as his

heat crawls slowly around my fearful

presence. I can't imagine the harm,

the horror he has in mind

for me. I can't imagine the depths,

the depravity of his torture.

As I try to adjust my senses to the jungle,

my hands bleed holding the weapon.

When the dark shadow is in range, I strike.

Stabbing the stiff bamboo spear repeatedly into him,

amid the blood-filled gurgles

and the screeching banshees,

I realized,

I finally and ultimately realized,

that not only did I like it,

 

I didn't want it to end. 

 

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This was actually an entry for a contest but I didn't submit it in time.

A contest entry

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  • RX-Queen
    June 6, 2008

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    Great write, one of those cases where the victim grows to love the captor and the abuse he brings, it's dark and twisted and I like it. Well done, Thanx for entering and good luck! )


  • deedee37
    April 20, 2008

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    This was very nice in the beginning but was kind of strange near the end. I was hooked until the end. I did like this though.


  • pantress silver member
    February 3, 2008

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    I loved the beginning, it had me following word for word. Intense, anticipating the next line, but in the end, while i understand where you were trying to go with it, the ending (below), left me wanting more. Perhaps if you reworded it to still say you liked it, but with more intensity as the lines above, it would flow better. just a thought.

    "I realized,

    I finally and ultimately

    realized,

    that I liked it."