Catkin swipes her tiny paws,
So hard she almost bumbles,
At Ratkin, stuffed with dainty straw,
While watching Mother grumbles:
“Don’t play so rough, you’ll make her tumble,
She’s just a kit, you know.”
“But she’s so cute,” sweet Moppet mumbles,
And it’s fun to watch her go.
“My Catkin lands without a fumble,
Leaps, and swats, and rolls;
She never falls into a jumble,
And she loves Ratkin so.”
Author notes
[“Catkin”: From obsolete Dutch katteken, kitten, diminutive of katte, cat (from its resemblance to a kitten's tail), from Germanic *kattuz]
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This is adorable! The meter and flow sound just like a nursery rhyme.
Love,
Amera♥
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Very cute...loved the rhyme and flow. It read like a short children's story...one like my daughter enjoys bringing home from the library. The images brought to mind by this upbeat little ditty were much enjoyed first thing in the morning. Very well done!
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Thank you. It was an unusual prompt--to write about "catkins" but not about flowers--and, being me, the first thing I did was head to the dictionary. The second thing was to remember the tone, diction, rhythms and rhyme in some of the pieces I taught in Children's Literature. This is my response, my attempt at re-creating a different time and place, and my homage to a kind of literature I much enjoy.
I'm glad it communicated some of that pleasure to you.
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I like it!
This is one very cohesive sounding poem - so much so that it sounds very much like an old nursery rhyme. Solid meter. Very nice indeed!
Paul
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Thanks. You hit it right--an old-fashioned nursery rhyme, with meter, rhyme, concrete characters but no actual names for them. It felt like something that might have been at home in a children's book from the 1890s. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
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