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Gone

pain sparking
fear trembling
not a moment
but an eternity
gone forever
but not forgotten











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  • azure85 gold member
    January 19, 2008

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    Good description for the word empty, "pain sparking" brings up a multitude of images. Good luck in the contest!


  • The Life Led
    January 19, 2008

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    The first two lines are my favourite.
    The fact that you personified the fear is nice and i can imagine pain sparking...
    nicely written (: