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Her Arms.

Every minute that goes by...
I realize she is gone.
That she is far away...
No way to get her back.
She's like a ship lost at sea.
Though sometimes I remember her holding me.
Her arms gave me comfort that I couldn't believe.
Sometimes,
I'd get out of control.
So mad...
At the world and everything.
But each time...
She would be there.
Never.
Never did I dare harm her.
I'd collapse on the floor...
Too tired and angry at the world.
She'd hold me.
When she held me in her arms.
I was safe.
From myself and from everything around me.
Now.
She's gone.
I find I can't hide.
Hide from myself any longer.
She never even knew.
Everything she'd done for me.
Now, she'll never know.
And she can't come back to hear it.
She.
She is what matters.
She loved me when no one did.
And now.
Now, I can't breathe.
Because her arms aren't here to save me...

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To the only girl who has ever really mattered in my life... And she never even knew.

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  • incondite
    May 22, 2008

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    This is a beautiful poem. Thank yo so much for posting it and giving other poets the chance to reaad it.
    Keep penning.
    -Steph


  • Beautyfull-x-Angel
    March 24, 2008

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    beautyfull i hope i can be that gurl for Allen my bf ... ... i kno he does that for me ... ... thank you and best of luck ... ...


  • luna-midnight gold member
    February 16, 2008
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    awww this is so sad *hugs*
    there, lol.
    wonderful write.
    keep up the good work
    stephanei


  • over the rainbow--x
    February 8, 2008

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    This, is painfully sad, why haven't you ever shared with her?
    If you don't mind me asking?

    Anyways, this was great, thanks for entering [=
    good luck [=
    ♥


  • Florida Sunshine
    February 8, 2008

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    aaaaaaaaaaah, its so sad ~ the last two lines are so are heartwrenching good ~ nice job ~ ~ You may want to consider taking out all the she's and I ~ I think you can convey to point that it is just the two of you... it seems a little over the top ~ and unecessary, but I stood understood the whole impact of what you were still trying to convery. ~ ~ I think tweeking it just a bit might really knock this write out of the park~ I've never seen anyone really relate a poem in the perspective ~ which made for a nice change.

    Thanks so much for entering the "Set the Bar" Contest ~ I really appreciate you sharing your work with me~ Best of luck to you!!!


  • Blooming Poet
    February 8, 2008

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    Love hurts sometimes and you portrayed that fact beuatifully here. The main thing you need to realize loosing love is no ones fault, except maybe fate


  • WoundedPrincess
    February 8, 2008
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    lol

    i forgot to appluad


  • WoundedPrincess
    February 8, 2008
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    Wow

    Thats beautiful! I really liked it


  • N e a r
    January 27, 2008

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    Reminds me of what I'm currently going through in a less intense sort of way, and she knows about it. Also, it's not exactly like this, more or less just us being apathetic towards each other. I hurt right now, and this poem helped me figure out how to put these emotions into words. Excellent job.

    Thanks for entering your write at A N Y T H I N G ~ G O E S ! Good luck!



    M a r l u x i a


  • ForeverxAlone
    January 26, 2008

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    Wow.

    This piece is overwhelmingly emotional to me
    my love for it is great.
    Wow, makes tears want to come to my eyes


  • GypsyEyes
    January 26, 2008

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    this brings tears to my eyes! your emotions are so very overwhelming! i loved this! i wish you the best of luck in the contest!
    NineTailedFox


  • Atrophya
    January 25, 2008
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    this makes me feel like crying.

    when you said you were too tired and angry at the world, it hit a nerve. ive been there but ive never ever had anyone hold me when I fell apart and cried and broke down the way i have. the only person who probably would have isn't there anymore. this is beautiful beyond words to me. i adore it.

    rain--x


  • make-me-feel
    January 24, 2008
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    wonderful


  • Hecate616
    January 24, 2008
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    Aw! I am very sorry...

    best of luck!


  • Pureisolation
    January 23, 2008
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    wow...wow you left me speacless. How that must feel to feel that way. Thank you for entering this poem. your poem gives off the impression she is dead, either if its emotionally dead or phyically. wow thats some huge emotion your stating in this poem. thank you for sharing.


  • DAMSELx
    January 23, 2008

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    This poem encases so much emotion. A beautiful portrayal of a secret love for someone who is no longer there. I loved this piece.

    Thank you for entering, good luck in the contest!


  • lemonhead
    January 22, 2008
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    Beautiful...
    Great work! I love it!
    -Lemonhead


  • hey charlie
    January 21, 2008
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    Good write. It's horrible to feel that alone, but unless one learns to stand on their own they'll always get seriously hurt when a person they love leaves (sorry, I'm pretty cheesy).I've read this poem quite a few times and I can't find any faults with it. Good job, you rock, and cheer up! Thanks for entering my contest.


  • dead-love-for-fun
    January 21, 2008
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    nice


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Gosh that was so sad... to have lost someone who loved you that way... the regret you feel is heartbreaking!!

    Thanks for entering!!


  • Just passing by
    January 20, 2008
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    Very good

    I really like what you have to say. It means a lot.
    Very good poem.


  • Dak
    January 20, 2008

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    Aww, it was so sad. =/. I know the feeling, and I'm sorry you lost her. As sad as it is, it's also a very good poem.


  • pulpyblood-dripping
    January 19, 2008

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    Uuuuummmmm okay, joey, that's odd. But I'm used to this kind of writing from you, All in all it was good. Good writing.

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