I was watching you for years
Saw you cryin’ blood
I didn’t understood
I gave you my heart
For ever and for all time
And i would never ever let you go.
But one day all my dreams turned to tears
and to all good things comes an end, that's a thing we all know..
you ended our fairytail and you broke my dreams, now break yourself as you broke my heart
Now i'm crying and laying awake in my bed, staring at the clock
feeling lonely, lost and broken, praying all this will stop.
my first poem on this site :$
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overwhelming emotion again...moving me to feel with you...another great write!
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Sadness
A joy to read
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wow wow wow! This was wonderful! it was very heart-felt and filled with melancholy thoughts!
great deep wmotions that cut deep into my heart! brilliant job! keep writing kays!
~RANJI
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wow.....
wow the pain in the words were powerful!!!!!! i loved it!!!
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Meep!
I like it!
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great
u happy
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Great poem I love it.
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i love it
thats perfect.....
again...
lol....
its my type of thing,
u no how to rite!
i love it
ily jade jellosey
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my favorite lines are these.
But one day all my dreams turned to tears
and to all good things comes an end, that's a thing we all know..
they're amazing. they really speak to me. and i like the jist of this because it is sad, but it shows how other people's actions can affect you or your friends.
its a sad sad story.
nice.
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Ugh, I know the pain. If this is true, I hope you feel better soon!
Poetically speaking, I see this more as just venting, not really poetic, but it must have felt great to get it out. I sort of wish I could do that. You might want to reread and edit your work when you're done, though, because netspeak (u, urself, etc) tend to look sloppy, and a lot of poets will avoid reading/critiquing your work because of it. Just saying. It's your poem & your call.
Not bad for a first poem! My first was much worse. >.<
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Now i'm crying and laying awake in my bed, staring at the clock
feeling lonely, lost and broken, praying all this will stop.
Oh this is truely a sad state of life..but indeed a powerful verse yet..well done....
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