At the edge of insanity
confusion leaks
from every breath I take ~
spinning me round
like a run down carousel
out of tune and frayed with neglect
Alone with my thoughts
that shatter my chest
each time I try to feel ~
tomorrow frowns
and I stay beneath turned up clouds
hoping to forget
what I'll always remember...
A contest entry
- Bleed For Me... by infinitechaos07.
600 points, ended February 1, 2008, 27 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Comments
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Very nicely done, you have some really good phrases in here and you capture the feelings and emotions perfectly in a little glass jar. Good luck
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this is a strong write penned with such deep emotion in your words i could really feel it. well done and best of luck
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Wow this is amazing... "hoping to forget what I'll always remember"... I feel that way myself. Very good job! Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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