Blind with these tears I cry,
cateracts of sorrow,
over the loss aching inside
a soul forsaken and alone.
A heart of glass is shattered
by your gentle touch,
spilling forth crystalline blood
as the wound cracks deeper still.
Left inside a hollow shell,
a corpse rotting inside;
tormented as shadows chant your name,
a restless spirit cries.
The wind whistles now through ivory bones,
[the flesh chewed away by loss,]
lonliness, a fatal disease, consumes -
the infected driven into madness.
Author notes
How I am feeling now.
A contest entry
- ALL ALONE!!!!!! by kales4.
375 points, ended February 15, 2008, 30 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Bleed For Me... by infinitechaos07.
600 points, ended February 1, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Critique?
Comments
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This is such a great piece.
I love how you compared loneliness
to a disease. It is somthing that
we all can do without in this life.
Well done and congratulations to you
on your Gold here!
Jeremy0826 -
Wow, very nicely written... good flow and use of imagery. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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Thank you for entering my contest. I love how you describe lonliness as a disease..... driving you insane as that is how im feeling.... absolutly insane.. Good Luck!
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