Tiny frame revolts
at persistent, deft escape
and tiptoed float
of metered air,
soft and muted,
as baby boy
hiccups
Author notes
For my sweet, new baby boy, Jesse
In a list
A contest entry
- 20 amazing words ~ anything goes by Lavender Butterfly.
450 points, ended January 19, 2008, 8 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Very cute indeed! A hiccup as only a mother can see it! You make the mundane seem beautiful.
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How sweet this is
So precious the child for they will inherite the earth in their own time lets make sure we teach them to love along the line
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beautiful!
congratulations!
what a wonderful gift you have penned for him!
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What a lovely description of infant hiccups! Love the "metered air" and the thought of hiccups as escaping and tiptoed floating. So sweet! Congrats on the gold!
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such a lovely piece of write for a loving mother like you, full of love in every words. congtats on the gold. it deserved...rose tattoo
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A very sweet and heartwarming image presented, can see the little struggle as the bubble is exhaled. Beautifully written and my congratulations on receiveing the Gold.
Mouser
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Your words are always so powerful and well stated...beautiful write for your son...congratulations and best to you all.
Children are so wonderful...
Best,
mystic
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This is just beautiful... Thanks ever so much for sharing.... x Love and light, Lavender Butterfly.
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Love the name Jesse by the way... x
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