I'm backed in a corner,
but find no way out.
I don't have a fucking clue,
what this is all about.
I stand staring out the window,
in a very numb state.
When I come to my senses,
I think boy this is just great.
What the hell is going on,
in this fucked up head of mine.
I can't figure out at all,
why I am so very blind.
I try to think of something,
but nothing comes at all.
So I throw myself to the floor,
and begin slowly bawl.
I wish I had the answers,
to fix what's wrong with me.
But right now I am so mixed up,
I can't clearly see.
Author notes
just more of exactly how I feel at this moment!
I'm Broken
A contest entry
- Bleed For Me... by infinitechaos07.
600 points, ended February 1, 2008, 27 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Unopened Packages... by JM Kenyon.
1750 points, ended February 15, 2008, 21 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Are You Broken??? Tell me about it!!! This Weekend Only! by Assisted-Suicide.
450 points, ended January 21, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - DREARY by Joe Bloggs.
300 points, ended February 3, 2008, 16 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - feeling lost i want sappy stuff people by Pureisolation.
450 points, ended February 15, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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wow this is really good. I really love how you wrote this peice. I lvoe the emotion you put into it. just wow. COngrats on the honorable mention. Keep up your amazing work!!!
Crimson -
Thanks so much for entering your poem in this contest.
I'm so sorry to be so late in commenting and judging.
s and best wishes always... ~Genie~
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man, do i ever hear you loud and clear! i am wondering just now, what the hell is wrong in my head. why can't i just straighten it out? what the hell? it is for sure a struggle we have with ourselves time and time again. but, it too will pass.. my grandma use to always say that, "this too will pass.." i try to find comfort in those words of wisdom.
many blessings and *stomps
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Thank you for entering my DREARY poem contest. You have come to the right place, dear. This is a very dreary poem indeed.
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Just one thing that needs correcting.
Last line in the second to last stanza would make more sense if read: and begin to slowly bawl.
This poem was really good, I definantly can feel your pain, and I know I can relate to you by your words! I think you should stop by my page sometime.
Good write!
~Princess
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Oh hun... I know exactly how you feel!!!
I related to this sooo much right now!!
Deep emotion express here in this outpouring of your soul...
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I wish I had the answers,
to fix what's wrong with me.
But right now I am so mixed up,
I can't clearly see.
Aah..this is the limitation of the life..and sometimes we are tapped by the life..but I hope this darkness is just very mommentary..this is a great write though..well done...
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okay so this pretty much describes me to a tee but i am sorry that you feel this way and i hope that you feel better soon this is one amazing piece of work and if that is a pic of you then you are very gorjus! i love the flow of this and the way you worded it this is truly a great write written from the heart pain slowluy trys to show itself while it seems you are trying to hide it i love this it simply beautiful!
love yah
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Damn... if that don't describe me right now I'm not too sure what does! ^This is very well written, I love how your emotions just pour out to me. Thanks for entering my contest and best of luck!
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The picture of yourself echoes the sentiment you share in this poem of yours. Sad,angry and frustrating. Even though I don't use this language my heart goes out to you. Hope things will get better Ellan. Take care.
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