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and her

her words, like
sharp chiseled ice;

though her embrace
carried that passion

that I adored so.

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  • micol
    January 19, 2008

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    Nicely done. Sharp, compressed, nothing wasted. And even though "embrace" seems a bit abstract, it is well balanced by "sharp chiseled ice," so the whose poem seems edged, filed, sharp.


  • XxYoru-OkamixX
    January 18, 2008
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    short but to the point. loverly, good kobs ^^


  • Amunet Wolfbane Moderators member
    January 18, 2008
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    I really dig the contrasts in this piece. The fire and ice aspect. A great job you've done.