Tears well up
Emotions drained
Prickly cold feeling creeps from deep down
A wall between others
Separating me
Cold outside
A melted slush on the inside
Heart beating in my throat
They all avoid me walking fast
Ice seems to fill the air
Eye glazed over
A blank expression
People brush me off they know not what they do
Pangs stab me maybe I should smile
But I can't my mouth is frozen
Solitude, my good friend
Visits way too many times
Being alone isn't right
No one should suffer it
Yet I do ever too often when you're gone and you're away
Author notes
unfortunately words can not explain the feeling of loneliness
it's as glose as i can come
A contest entry
- Coping with Being Alone by zappa.
900 points, ended January 19, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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yaaaaaaaaaaaaaa!!!!!!!!!!!!!! you got honorable winner!!!!!!! good job!!! But you're never alone!! You'll always have me! Just talk and I swear I'll listen! but I do understand that one can be lonely in a crowded room, so ya. good job again!
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I wish I could say I like this....well, I do, but you've got some powerful emotions coming out in this piece. Maybe I feel it resonating with mine a little too much. Great writing.
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"Pangs stab me maybe I should smile
But I can't my mouth is frozen."
I usually don't repeat another's words unless they stay with me -even after the poem is read and weighed.
I get the ice feeling of extreme cold and frozen emotions. -colder than the air letting loose outside of our very windows. Hmm. I'm thinking
I must read this one again too.. great job!
-and yes you're right. Words will never explain loneliness -they'll only describe it. -
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thank you!
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