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~ Questions of a Lost Soul ~

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Self searching for a meaning to live
Dare I chance a look at the core of my soul
Tentatively probing that which is held within;
Would I be safer blinded in ignorance?

Shall I meander along just the way I am
Care I to delve into reasons for my dilemma  
Are there answers to be found deep within;
Or is it fruitless to seek what cannot be seen?

Where be the reason for the nature of my being
Should I find that which I thirst for
Somewhere midst the hollow sensed within;
A brief glimpse of substance would suffice!

Who's brush has painted the colour of my world
Will the answer remain hidden forever
Shall I live in fear of toneless sepia within;
Or mayhap feast my eyes upon elusive rainbow?

Dare I chance a look at the core of my soul
Care I to delve into reasons for my dilemma
Should I find that which I thirst for, or ...
Will the answer remain hidden forever?

 

 

Author notes

Challenge by Mike Howes:

This poem is made using different single words relating to ‘existence’, which is the final word used at the end of each first line.

The second line in each stanza when strung together, produces a stanza of their own covering the body of the write in one.

The third line always ends with the word ‘within’ relating to the feelings and sights seen from the inside.

And finally, each final line in each stanza relates to ‘sight’

'For second contest by Loveandblessings2u: I usually write Humorous Rhyme and rarely take a challenge of form like this one required which is free verse.

Dagnabbit, I thought I did not rhyme but when I took those 2nd lines for the final stanza...slap!

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  • rbruce gold member
    September 2
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    truly excellent. You rose to the challenge and excelled yourself. Congrats on the gold. Your questions are better left unanswered, how else can you keep your curiosity in full cry?


  • Cynthia Gaines gold member
    July 17

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    Congratulations on the Golden Chalice!!

    A very intriguing write, Poetess!! Thank you for sharing. I'm wishing you all the best!!
    Peace,
    Cyn


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      July 17
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      Thanks...it was definitely a challenge to meet the contest criteria set for this one.
      Do appreciate you stopping by.
      Linda


  • Arkbear gold member
    January 14

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    I enjoyed the insight witjhin your words.....I seea tad more *Tell* going on rather than a good balance of *Show & Tell*....but I adore your accent, and this is your style......just remember to take me on a journey of movement and do not leave me standing in the same *type* of thought.....nice job and that Gold looks good over there

     

    God bless you!

     

    Bear ~


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      January 18
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      Thanks for reading this one Bear...it was a tad difficult to take into the Show
      range as Mike's form was limited to x amount of lines and specific wording/line format.
      God willing my muse will go deeper from now on without me holding it back... wanting to hide the real me from the world.
      I am in touch with my 'feelings' again so let's see what comes out in the future

      God Bless

      Linda


  • Hebz
    August 24, 2008
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    Amazingly penned!

    Thnx for entering & Best of Luck : F

    GloriousGift
    Heba


  • DawnBaby
    August 12, 2008

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    Excellent!

    I very much enjoyed this one, you are so talented! Go ahead look inside, you will love what you see in there!


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      August 13, 2008
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      My sweet Sista...you have been peeking
      Shhhh! Mike cracks a mean whip Just glad I could measure up and now I am avoiding WPS Contests like the plague. (Yeah right! )
      Much Love & thanks


  • crivanea silver member
    August 5, 2008

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    love it!!!...man..this should be in my philosophy book...lol..perfect pic. to match w/ the perfect peom on existencialsm...to be or not to be..that is the question..really nice job..good luck in the contest


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      August 5, 2008
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      Thanks So pleased you enjoyed this one. I rarely go this deep but when I do I try to make a reasonable statement or in this case question???
      Cheers on a great contest.
      I am honoured to be added to your favs.
      Linda


  • deercatcher
    July 19, 2008
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    I enjoyed this.


  • quantumsurveyor
    June 25, 2008

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    This has to be admired as I don't know how anyone could stay the course on such a dagnabbit cursed plan for a poem. These formalists have summat to answer for. You did well.


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      June 25, 2008
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      You ain't tellin' me nothin' I didn't learn when bashing my head against the wall to complete this one
      Thanks for commenting
      Linda


  • rbruce gold member
    February 17, 2008

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    This may have taken a bit of thought and hard work, but it's well worth it. Congrats on a fine job, with a gold to show for it. Cheers, Bob.


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      February 17, 2008
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      Thank you very much Bob. It certainly gave the grey matter a workout but pleased I gave it a go.
      Linda


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 9, 2008

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    Think this took a little bit of effort and mind over matter to get this right. Well done, and a super gold to show for it all.


    • Recluse Writer gold member
      February 9, 2008
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      Thanks grannyeri...yes Mike did present quite a challenge here and am verrrry proud to have bagged the gold for this one. Thanks for commenting
      Linda


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    January 31, 2008
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    GO YOU GOOD THING Congrats on the very well deserved Gold Cuz If I could give you another lot of 'happy clappies' I would. Love you Cuz


  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    January 31, 2008
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    GOOSEY, YOU ROOOOOOOOOOOCK! Congratulations on the gold! Wahooooooooooooooooooooooooo!


  • Freed by Mercy silver member
    January 30, 2008

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    An interesting form and exercise in brain power, like a puzzle. I find lots of poems to be that way, especially rhyme and form, but always every poem, when it needs revision or would benefit by it, is a puzzle. I find it strange that you use no punctuation on the final lines of each stanza, especially question marks. I see, though, that you would have a mass of question marks.

    Congratulations on receiving the Gold medal.

    I must say, though a successful as an exercise of a form, the poem did not progress. It remained static.


    • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
      January 31, 2008
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      I think the static is a reflection of the uncertainty and questions that remain unanswered.


  • funpum
    January 30, 2008

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    brilliant

    I really enjoyed this Linda. There is something about the style it is written in which echoes the way one niggles away at a thought, over and over, as you worry about such things. I think I can safely say though, your soul is not boring old sepia. Oh no.

    Lxx


  • aronator
    January 28, 2008

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    True Poet

    That is really deep, you have a great vocab.
    I am totally new to this but tried to enter this contest also, mainly because Im doing research with brain waves, and seen a pic of a brain
    Can u check out mine and let me know what u think of it as I am a scientist but do love to write poems...although I know I need to work on my vocab. How long do usually spend writing a poem?

    I really like "Dare I chance a look at the core of my soul " I think a lot of people do not..and they lead a life without a goal or a dream...thats what I was trying to get at in my poem


  • passim silver member
    January 24, 2008
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    Wow honey, this is amazing. You have been hiding your talents for free verse from us. My favorite stanza is the 4th Superb. Best of luck in the contest cuz.

    Who's brush has painted the colour of my world
    Will the answer remain hidden forever
    Shall I live in fear of toneless sepia within;
    Or mayhapse feast my eyes upon elusive rainbow


  • Silent Cougar Moderators member
    January 22, 2008

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    genius, pure genius....

    I knew when I set this out, that there would be at least one that would not only follow the rules of the set up, but also produce something far greater than the example poem.

    Every aspect of the challenge ha been adhered too, and the end result is simply outstanding. For this to be written by someone claiming to be a humour/jokey writter, just amazes me at the talent that must be hidden too often...

    extremely well done, and well, the stakes have been laid,, lets see what trasnpires.

  • Turtle74
    January 20, 2008

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    curiousity keeps us moving forward with learning, we don't always get to pick what or when we learn. this can make the picture ugly sometimes,"shall you meander along just the way you are" no there are to many unanswered questions in life. And change is always happening.


  • JaydinC
    January 20, 2008

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    wow...gonna have to think about this one alittle bit. posed a different angle on something I think everyone asks themselves sometime. it may be different and new to you but it definetly was worth branching out and giving it a shot.


  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    January 20, 2008

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    Now this is some outstandong poetry.

    You started it off magnificently and close it out so perfectly.
    And everything in between was just remarkable.
    Powerful writing, with an amazing flow.

    Loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce

    Good Luck ~~~


  • LAPoe gold member
    January 19, 2008

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    WOW Linny...I am VERY IMPRESSED!!! quite heady material
    from such a jester!!! Doc says you need to take a
    dumbing down and rest awhile you deserve it!!
    Sleep well in the knowledge that your soul serching
    is stupendous!!!! if this doens't win I don't know
    what will! Doc.
    If I were to try this my brain would bust open and out would spill all my marbles then I would be truely
    empty headed.


  • malmadre gold member
    January 18, 2008
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    What you have written are questions that I often ask myself..very meaningful poem.


  • YoursTrulyJulie gold member
    January 18, 2008

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    Well...totally new seems to work Very well penned indeed Cuz Best of luck to you in this contest

  • Fairy Nutty Buddy silver member
    January 18, 2008

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    Oooooooooooh... deep, questioning, thoughtful with a dash of hopefulness.

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