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Empty Space

Blunt sounds of beating fill empty space in a devastated city
Wails of children echo within the city limits
Gun shots silence the pleas for mercy
Fire encircles threatening to destroy

A frightened huddle in scraps of clothing cling to what remains
Shadows loom above one blow and they too become remains
Leers smirk upon the sad human race
Destruction from within isn't difficult

Being merely human one can turn against their own kind
Crippling the human race isn't hard
Like marionettes string by string the world unravels
Slowly simply the humans bring upon their own demise

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  • greatperhaps
    January 27, 2008

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    wow just wow... very powerful. creepy and reminds me greatly of Batman Begins (sorry just watched it and sound eeriely like Gotham) if in a contest then good luck!


  • Tarja
    January 18, 2008

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    RULE: Tell me which option you chose in your AUTHOR'S NOTES.

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