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Doctor

This is how it was
and was always meant to be
my ineptitude
in the trenches
was juxtaposed against
your artistry
my gassed war wounds
and your pretty hands
you
splendid mechanic of the flesh.

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  • Perception
    February 17, 2008
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    I like your use of words. It really made the poem what it is... I am always fascinated to how people make prose flow. This one had wondrous flow. and it had great meaning...

    You have an amazing way with words... Perhaps I shall look at some of your other poetry.. *sniffles around*

    Thanks for this fascinating read


  • Abbey Normal
    January 21, 2008

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    "splendid mechanic of the flesh"...

    Okay, that's a real mind blowing line right there. I really like the way it sounds, the deepness that pours from it... and that element of perfection personified that lingers behind it.

    It's very interesting how you've written this. Healed with a touch, you know...

    So impressed by your choice of words too!

    Love,
    Chrissy

    Ps. It's good to see a new write from you. I was craving your genius.