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Georgia Tried

 

 

He stumbles
grace embraces him,
he falls the sands
pull him under.

Her hands dig
in the red clay of Georgia,

numb and bleeding

tears mix with red clay

never to wash the stains away.

Lost  in his own pain

only to be saved by self,

 

~still "Georgia" tried.

 



 

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  • Blooming Poet
    March 18

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    unique poem. I love it. especially here: He stumbles grace embraces him, he falls the sands pull him under.

  • imahealer gold member
    February 6

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    Encore!

    What a wonderful metaphor of your desperate attempt to save your son.
    In the end, you have learned already, we can only save ourselves. Few words, strong images! You always write your heart on your sleeve.
    Much love, Sis XOXO

    . Rewarded 4


  • Lexie - gold member
    February 6
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    Beautiful

    as always mom, you blow me away


  • grannyeri gold member
    February 6

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    Not sure what the prompt was in this contest, but appears to have something to do with trying to save someone. Oft times some find that there is nothing to save them from themselves, even though others try hard to do just that.

  • Grey Mouser
    January 18

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    One that seeks to save one from themself, yet finds that the other is lost to himself in exile. Nicely written and best to you in the contest.

    Love,
    Mouser


  • penman gold member
    January 18
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    excellent

    Beautifully penned 20 words. Best of luck in the contest.

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