An angel's tear
falls from the Heavens
and alights on her sweet lips
proving to her,
her love is true.
A contest entry
- DFI Round 2 ~ Short and Sweet by And Hyetal.
800 points, ended February 5, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Imagery: 1 point
Theme: 1 point
Use of Form/Flow: 1 point
Other criteria: 0 points
Overall Appeal: 1 point
Well, this certainly had a beautiful theme, but I personally think there were too many pronouns used (you said "her" too much
). But it doesn't really inhibit the flow of the poem badly, so I'll give you the point there. I love the idea and theme, great there.
So, 4 more points for team Balladeer!
~Cassie
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Very sweet and love the imagery. Well said!
WolfHeart
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All I can say is, if you don't win, there shall be blood -.- ...and cake -.- lots and lots of cake (and not the good kind) >.>
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I like this! Although it is short it is still powerful. You really did a good job on this one. Keep it up and continue penning!
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What a great read!!!! OMG!!!!!! How wonderful is that thought!!!!! And well, you know where this wonderful read took me!
Best of luck in this contest!!
and love
Mom
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I love the third line...in context with the whole poem it is just wonderful, very sweetly written in such few words Very enjoyable and uplifting (although the angel is crying =[ ), good luck in the contest and take care x
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