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I change into a wolf, I'm no longer a man.
My eyes pop out so far, I see people in Japan.
My lower jaw goes through the floor,
I think I feel the earth's core.
My tongue is like an endless red carpet
where you can walk on with your high heels.
Your beauty cannot be bought on ACME Market.
My howl can be heard from the moon, for real.

It doesn't matter how many pianos you drop on me,
my teeth will always play a perfect symphony.
My heart is like a basketball,
bouncing with the speed of light.
Your smell lifts me with its odorous call.
I always stand up, even if I fall from great heights.

I hope we're not like Tom and Jerry,
I hope that we're the contrary.
Like those Joseph and Mary
or whipped cream and a cherry.

I'm not in love, I'm just drawn that way.
No pain can stop me from loving you another day.

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  • Melissa Burns
    July 1, 2008

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    Hmmm this is a very interesting and unusual poem. I had never considered what a love letter from a cartoon would look like.... Thanks for entering my contest!


  • theflamepoetess
    May 28, 2008

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    wow i really like this and the cartoon theme is funny yet great!! best of luck to you in the contest


  • xCandieKissesx
    May 14, 2008

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    Well expressed. I don't like how you entered all those other contests but thats okay. I like the imagery! Great job and thanks for your entry!

    + Jackie

  • Musafir
    April 8, 2008
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    well expressed.
    Best wishes and good luck


  • z etoile
    March 26, 2008
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    It doesn't matter how many pianos you drop on me,
    my teeth will always play a perfect symphony.
    My heart is like a basketball,
    bouncing with the speed of light.


    I liked those verses the best. I like this very much I especially liked the end great write!


  • leander Moderators member
    February 22, 2008

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    This is quite an interesting poem that you have written here. Eyes popping out that far that you're able to see people in Japan
    Anyway, you did a good job with the rhyming of this, though I noticed it's not in a particular scheme. Not sure if that came naturally or if you did so on purpose?

    Thank you for entering the contest, I wish you the best of luck!
    Leander


    • C.I.M.A Punk
      February 22, 2008
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      Thanks for the comment.
      And the rhyming scheme was naturally, if you want to know that.


  • xxRainbowDawnxx
    February 15, 2008
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    This is ever so sweet... that's some true feelings, dispite all the odds!

  • karmacae
    February 15, 2008
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    this was something different to read. I love how you brought classic cartoon into a love poem, eyes popping out and tongues rolling on the floor, too funny, I would have loved it if someone wrote this for me. wonderful job and good luck in the other contest....Crystalgodess


  • Wilted Rose Bush
    February 13, 2008
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    It's a good write. And very emotional. A bit weird too. Well done and good luck in the contest.


  • Rebekah-Ann silver member
    February 13, 2008

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    ~~~ Thank you very much for entering this beautiful poem… ~~~

    Wow this was different!

    I enjoyed it to the last letter. I hope she loves you back all the same!!

    ~~~ Good luck in the contest and hope you enter again ~~~

    Becks


  • SugarCandyKittyKat
    February 5, 2008
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    Adorable piece...quite unique...


  • N e a r
    February 3, 2008

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    Your comparison within this poem is truly miraculous.
    And your descriptions are just off the roof.
    Wonderful writing!
    Thanks for entering. Good luck.


  • Sf
    January 30, 2008
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    I had no idea it was a love poem until 'I hope we're not like Tom and Jerry.' This is really good.


  • Princess Peach
    January 29, 2008

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    Ha-ha! Funny! I liked the comparison about Tom and Jerry and such! I think this is a really good poem any person would like, especially since Valentine's day is coming up! Thanks for entering and best of luck in the contest!


  • pappacass
    January 29, 2008
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    this was cool

    had to read it twice to realize it was a love poem....lol
    brillaint


  • Perception
    January 27, 2008

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    Hehe. How very cute. I liked this one. It wasn't a typical love poem. And your descriptions were great! I really liked the rhyming too, it was done very well.

    Hehe. What a pleasurable read! I enjoyed every line.

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