Beauty took its wings and soared.
And I clung tight to the back of it,
Anchored to the ground by the weight
Of the eyes of the dearly beloved
Gathered here before us.
A flock of butterflies
beat miniature wings,
Turning my insides fluttery
I stepped, relishing the pull
of silk against my thigh
And the abrupt staccato of the tapdance
My shoes rang out against stone.
Clock chimes measure out the night
Opaque skies are sliced across their breast
To light the shoes abandoned by the door
Crushed swathes of cloth, accusing my chastity,
My dress lain out, as it is, in a mean grin
on the balding carpet of a cheap hotel suite.
You took me to bed
And I watched dusk yawn and shut its eye
The gold ring on my finger
felt like prison as I lay and listened
and felt as my world change from above me
my life looked the freckles on your shoulder.
A contest entry
- It's My Birthday! Help Me Celebrate!!! by xxRainbowDawnxx.
1050 points, ended January 28, 2008, 15 entries
Bronze trophy winner
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Wow, you have written a good piece here! The beginning is beautiful with the way you describe beauty full of imagery and concrete visuals instead of feeling. The ending is excellent. Good way of describing these hard-to-describe kind of feelings. I am impressed.
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M a r l u x i a
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I found this quite magnificent; loved the take on the word bank and I just... felt each word, whilst reading this. Maybe because you have felt this way, or maybe because I have... Either way, the write is very emotive and beautiful.
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0_0 wait "blue flutters" Sorry.
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I like it...
maybe the title
"flutter" thats up to you
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def needs a diff title.
but the content is amazing. i cant imagine how many people really feel like that. omg. i loooove this!
um. i really like line(s)...
The gold ring on my finger felt too much
like a prison cell as I lay and listened
that has been me five million times over. and my always ruin relationships as sooon as there is a commitment involved. <3 this is really good. i dont know no one has read it.
loved it!
-nikkie.
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I know the title isn't the best but I tried literally about twenty, I was going for some old,new,borrowed,blue theme with that but its clunky....Any ideas??
thanks for the comment
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