I look at you
And find I see nothing
But blind pain
And scorching hatred
You look at me
But you're not really seeing
There's nothing there
You're blank
And it's scaring me
What have I done
To make you be this way?
Obviously it's my fault
Because
When I'm near
You inch away
Show me, tell me
Let me make it better
Please don't leave this wound
Wide open
Who knows what may get in?
The room stopped spinning
Your hands stopped shaking
And I've stopped screaming
For now
What is it?
Show me, tell me, please
There's a voice inside
And it's not leaving
It's cut your heart
Wide open.
Author notes
Inspired by the saying. Hope it's what you wanted, I know it's weird. Enjoy.
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Wow, sis! This piece really... I don't know. It describes how I've been feeling lately. My boyfriend and I have been having a little bit of trouble and... well I don't want to get into it now. But this piece is amazing. It is intense and I can feel the words you wrote pumping through my veins. It's almost like you knew I was feeling like this. I couldn't find the words to say to write it down, but you did. Gosh, I'm rambling... I'm sorry. But this piece... it just gets to me. This is great sis. Good job. Love ya!
♥Chelsea
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Thank you for your interpretation of my quote. Appreciate your entry and good luck in the contest. Storm
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damn, this was amazing. one of your best for sure. i see imagery, metaphors, damn so many things! and it's short but so expressive... you definitely get a standing ovation from me hun!
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very intense and deep.. i loved it
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Most intense piece this is..wow!
Wishing you the best of luck in this contest! -
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Thanks so much! Glad you liked it!
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