barbed wire
endless world of dying
captured in sadness
behind this fence
here, you are
either 'healthy'
or dead
I am dead
I walk around
without caring anymore
it's easier not to think
lay down
drift off
and wake up
in a better place
Author notes
http://allpoetry.com/column/2340231
A contest entry
- contest for free verse poems by Manoj Sanyal.
375 points, ended January 20, 2008, 13 entries
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Comments
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Living in Germany must lead to profoundly intense thoughts and feelings about the actions of the Nazis. A poignant and beautiful poem, Annie.
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Hey Mel
I just re-read your comment on this piece... And gosh, you can't possibly imagine just HOW RIGHT you were when you said that. Today there was a rally of the neo-Nazi party in my hometown. Imagine that! Luckily, there was a counter demostrastion by poeple who are not afraid of standing up for what they believe in!
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Wow what a dark poem! Sometimes we do feel that way great job!
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Great iimagery presented here. love it.
Just remember to captilize yourr i's, it makes your poem look better and you look like a better poet. Just FWI -
Hello and thanks for entering my contest i thought your piece was very Good i like the story you had there best of luck to you and thanks again.
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emotive and well written...
Best wishes,
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Intense piece. Powerful "either 'healthy' or dead/i am dead/...without caring anymore". There is truly a kind of death that comes from withdrawing into self from caring about others. When surrounded by overwhelming levels of misery and suffering, death looses much of its fearsome aversion, and may gradually become welcome friend.
Well written with terse economy of words.
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An excellent write dear niece! Yes the horrors remembered are often to much to bear and drifting to another p[lace is the way many cope.
All the best with this thought provoking write
Gaylene
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lil cuz this is awsome
good luck in the contest
xxx cheeky xxx
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